Comments : The Wick

  • 10 years ago

    by Kristina

    Wow great job! i really like it a lot. it flowed so nicely. And i really like what you wrote about! 5/5

    ~Kristina

  • Aww.how sweet...i loved it...5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    Aw this was a beautiful little poem! I like the whole idea of "lighting the wick again", It's really cute lol. Nice flow too. 5/5

    marcella

  • 10 years ago

    by in.need.of.a.lucky.charm

    You said it all, short, but sweet and straight to the point. well done hun

    much love and many kisses,
    bex

  • 10 years ago

    by Mo

    Stephen, I am always blown away by the fact that you are only 16 and yet you're writing things like this - its amazing. Hope you're getting an A++++++ in English!!! :) Good job. I enjoyed it.

  • 10 years ago

    by Kaila

    Woah this was wonderful nice job!!

  • 10 years ago

    by Brittney Follett

    Yes very sweet and it created a great image in my head. Though I think you should acutally set up some stanza and put in some grammer:

    Resonating candlelight
    That ebbs and flows just like the sea
    Making me remember that
    The two of us were meant to be

    Filling through the atmosphere
    With light that flickers -- dim...
    Searching for a match
    So I can light the wick again...

    Ta da! if you don't capitalize and puncuate or whatever it makes your work look sloppy and it seems as if you just threw it together in a few seconds. Make it look as good as it sounds.

    Great rhyming and flow.

    5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Mezmeryz

    Aww that was soo sweetand cute..lol very well written..short but fulfilling. keep it up! x

  • 10 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    To be so young you sure are talented. I love this cute little poem. Although short, it got the point across. It flowed well and the structure and word choice were good. Excellent job on this!

  • 10 years ago

    by John Long

    Enjoyed the imagery of the first two lines and the double meaning of "Searching for a match" which is quite imaginative. Well written.

    Nice work!

  • 10 years ago

    by I Love You

    This is a very good poem