"Even sun shining above me"
^ You should add 'the' after Even.
"Fades as dropping from the sky"
^That doesn't really make sense. :/ I get what you're saying though.
^ Both of those words rhyme with the above word, therefore you should change the word 'begins' or take out the word 'again'.
I loved this poem, it was a great write. And, I'm soo sorry for you loss, hun. I hope you're doing okay. <3 I really like this poem, and as I was reading I was like.. I wonder if she's talking about an ex or something, you know. Because, it was like.. that kinda poem. But, you weren't. The story behind it, I guess gives it so much more meaning than what readers think before they read it all.
This is a great poem, and the fact that it came from deep within makes it even greater than anyone can imagine, except you.
I loved this, again you did an excellent job. i am soo sorry for your loss. You have alot of talent, and I think as long as you keep expressing yourself though written words that you will get though it. Keep writting, and stay strong. 5/5
Oh my gosh!!....such a beautiful poem...sooo touching!!....there r few mistakes though which r pointed out in the earlier comments though...but the poem is all the same...Beautiful!