Comments : If Everyone Cared

  • 11 years ago

    by disturbed one

    Theres no 4.5 so i will round it up to 5 =D

    The only thing i noticed was that the last line of each stanza...the syllables are a bit you added 1 more syllable to each one and took one off the second last stanza it would be perfect =D

  • 11 years ago

    by donna

    Crazy the devastation just a couple of people can make on the world just because they have been given some sort of power... A very heartfelt, well written poem hun... well done xx

  • 11 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I loved this...such a perfect opener and each stanza just jept getting better.
    I thought the flow was good throughout, the imagery was beautifully done and the ending was perfecr.

  • 11 years ago

    by The Lonely Rose made a good point...stupid Bush.....if everyone cared there will b no killing....just ppl dying from mayb car crash or old age....a good write =)

  • 11 years ago

    by TaNyabAbEE

    WOW!!!!! i really liked this. it is really amazing and truthful, and i wish your poem could come true. that all our officers would come home, and the fighting would stop. but our world is difficult. i really like this, and i wish the government would take this into consideration. i give it a 5/5 (i'd give you more, but you'll have to be happy with a 5, although it deserved like a 7 or 8!!!!!)

  • 11 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Yet another wonderful write. I noticed you like the rhyming scheme aabb, in which you do a wonderful job.

    Peace, Joe

  • 11 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    I liked this a lot. I'm always most interested in poems which go for a directed subject, something that is happening around us everyday (aka. war, like in your poem).

    It was pretty much perfect, in my opinion. Nice work. :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Stephanie

    Amazing & Powerful.
    And the sad thing is all of this is true. I'm curious.... did 'Nickelback's song If Everyone Cared' inspire this poem? =] I'm wondering. I loved the poem hun, keep writing! 5/5

    Stephanie Lynn .+.

  • 11 years ago

    by Wallace

    Very nice, i really enjoyed this, loved the start, loved the ending good job.

    PS. Plz rate and comment on my poems

  • 11 years ago

    by N M Lambert

    Fantastic poem. has a great and important message running through it. enjoyed this x

  • 11 years ago

    by lost and incomplete

    Magnifcently written well worded poem, the flow was smooth, stayed on track, all in all i thought it was a great read, keep up the good work.

  • 11 years ago

    by Moon Princess

    It would be different if everyone cared. This pretty much summed up it all. Good work, it flowed really well and I loved the topic.
    xXAnother Crystal Tear FallsXx

  • 11 years ago

    by UnwrittenTragedy

    Amazing, so true and i know EXACTLY where your coming from. Love it!

  • 11 years ago


    Hahaa I noticed you put my little marking guide there lol, you'er too cute. Anyways, as I said in that I loved this. The president really needs something like this to set him on the right track haha.


  • 11 years ago

    by Victoria Rainey

    Your poem is so touching and soo sad .. I love it.. I agree with ur poem too .. well done 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Choose xX Alex Xx Life

    This is sooooooo cool i always go on about this in my poems lol im like an old an though. You pull it off a lot easier than me it seems like all words fall into place :D

    xxx alex xxx