Scent Of Dead

by Simple Sensation   Apr 19, 2007


As you walk through the hall,
A scent of dead surrounds you
It provokes your sense, reminds you,
Of all those who have died, because
Their life could not be saved...

People lie in wards, many are dying
Yet many are struggling, trying
to survive. They fight the inevitable.
Regret overtakes them, as they realise
Death is knocking... Death's door has been opened.
So many things they wish they hadn't said.
So many actions, they wish they hadn't done.
They left it too late,
Not another chance, for a final "I Love You"
Not a chance to apologise, "I didn't mean what I said"
No more chances left, because they are now dead.

This scent of dead,
Is mixed with a scent of regret
Walking through the hospital hall,
These scents awaken my mind
I send that apology,
I let those who I care about;
Know what they mean to me.
This scent of dead, mixed with regret,
Should forever be inside of your mind.

Contemplating Suicide
19th April 2007

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  • 18 years ago

    by Startle Me

    Shouldn't this be
    A scent of dead surrounds you
    A scent of death surrounds you?
    I don't think it has that much
    Flow on it.
    I understand your meaning.
    Your rhymings are great.
    But a poem needs to flow a bit more.
    Check on some of your spellings.
    I think you spelled
    Realized wrong.
    Lol.

  • 18 years ago

    by ASPHYXIATED

    Both my parents are doctors & I've spent my fair share of time in hopsital so this poem really made me thinhk.

    I loved it because it showed different veiws people have, different thoughts when walking through a place full of sickness.

    Again the flow was choppy but I loved this poem because of its content. It was a great idea and I really enjoyed reading it.

    The structure of your writing could improve your poems greatly, the ideas are really good.

    =]

  • 18 years ago

    by Vanessa

    I love this poem, your choice of waord is amazing. well pinned, great flow 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by CHOKE

    Lovely poem hun :D
    and thank you for loving my poem so much and letting it win the contest. i tried my hardest :)

    5/5 love.

  • 18 years ago

    by Darien

    That was a pretty thought provoking poem, and it was really deep. I thought it was ironic reading a poem about life from someone who's username is 'Contemplating Suicide'. It's an interesting poem, you shouldn't be thinking about death so much. Good poem though.

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