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by Alex Apr 21, 2007
Sadness, depression /
Driving in the car, in the back seat,
I hear a slow smooth song on the radio, staring out the side window,
I stare at one spot on the road
the yellow line deviding the lanes.
Thinking of you,
in a deep sense of mind,
my throat gets that oh so familiar lump,
we hit a bump.
...And I'm pulled back to reality.
A tear sliding down my cheek,
I flitter about making sure
I don't look like I was crying,
but inside I know I'm dying.
by Jenni Marie
This is beautifully written and so very sad at the same time...though short you managed to put such a lot of emotion and depth into this piece, and it makes for a very intense read.
Aahaa it relates to me.. nice work i loved your poem offcourse words was also nicely used in this poem i willm ust give 5/5
by xxSnow Angelxx
Good work...very touching...sudden ride to reality...great work....u've done this one so well..in a real well manner..kp it up!
by Hidden Feelings within these Words
I agree with Gem, you make it look easy. I have a hard time writing poems taht don't rhyme. Good work though, kiddo. I liked the message in this poem. =)
by Ashleigh Skye
Dieing = dying
I liked this poem.. it was short and I liked how nothign rhymed.. the only thing I would change is I would put some metaphores in it.. makes it a bit more creative and more poem like instead of just seeming like a story.