I really like how you place a deeper meaning in this poem. Its very nicely written accept for that one part in it
"When she reaches rock bottom
And the ground wonâ??t break open"
Im pretty sure its "won't" other than that this poem was very good. Keep up the good work.

At first, it didn't make sense to me.
It was contradiction.
I'm never good at that.
But when I read the second contradiction.
I just found the whole poem beautiful.
You should read it, though.
wonâ??t
You should edit that.
Other than that.
5/5?

I like the antagonistic sense of ubiquitesness*( i cant spell for crap) but its meaning is almost a perfect example of the first 2 lines. im a dan of this poem. its got a good direction too.

tom/5

Well placed poem.
Its a very sadly true poem.
I'd like to hear what you meant by it though.
I do understand it but what you felt from it t actually write it.
Interesting piece.

"And the ground wonâ??t break open"
Uhh, you just need to edit that.

I like the paradoxes you used in this poem, but the only problem I found with it, it all you did was just write a statement that was opposing. You should sort of show how she falls, and how she flies. Like go deeper into detail on those things. It was a good poem though, and it was only a suggestion.

I really like this poem. A LOT!!! its sooooo good

The poem was interesting due to the dual points of view. The highs and the lows. However, the ambiguity of the poem creates a slight confusion for the reader. The flow was rough and could use small edits to help improve the fluency. All in all the poem's meaning ended up strong even though the reader had to sift through the double meanings and contradictions. 5/5.

I really like this poem.. It was very intresting to see the different views and it was very deep.. i liked that.. over all it was a great poem!.. keep up the good work!

She seems to be in a sort of limbo, not being able to find a middle ground for peace. Not being able to break through to the other side of a pain or hard time. It is a deep poem, I like the unique structure of it.

Great write 5/5

This was interesting i enjoyed it alot. There was such a deep meaning written behind it and it showed greatly throughtout it. loved the format of it, quite unusal in a good way though. Well done with this. Great work~mel