I like this -- this was quite a persuasive write. Well, for me, it was. I have a question: did the parents of the ill-fated child abandon him? Fantastically touching, as always. Keep it up, hun! Love, Debbie cakes
Loved it! At first when I read the title and how you said it was another sad child story I thought it would go along the same lines as Martina McBride's song Concrete Angel, which still makes me cry everytime I hear it as your poem did when I read it. Yes, sadly, this does happen everyday =[
Anyhow, one thing..
"born early from what his parents done."
^^ You could add a "had" between parents and done to tie it together and better the flow.
Great job Babe! I know I haven't been reading a lot of yours or commenting, but I will try to do more!
This is so depressing. and it is sad to thing about this kind of stuff happening. i wish people would see how dumb they are when this kind of stuff happens and how much they are hurting people. who knows...maybe your poem will help people see that.