Outside rain

by BreeAnna   May 29, 2007


Looking through the window,
I can feel the cool breeze,
I hear the rain falling down,
so cold I could freeze.

I look at the swingset,
and picture us together,
we were always hand in hand,
even in the stormy weather.

the swings are empty now,
you are at home with your wife,
I sit on the porch alone,
reviewing my life.

the pool was our haven,
we always had so much fun,
but what was once then no longer exists,
what we had is done.

I miss those summer nights,
sitting with you under the stars,
I wish one day we meet again,
I hope you are happy where ever you are.

I walk out of the bathroom,
where we first kissed,
and hope you realize as you go to bed tonight,
how deeply you are missed.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Brittany C

    I liked it. The flow was a little off towards the end of the poem. I really liked the word choice and the format was good. I gave it a 5/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by Boy

    I miss those summer nights,
    sitting with you under the stars,
    I wish one day we meet again,
    I hope you are happy where ever you are.

    great writing i loved you poem take care

  • 16 years ago

    by ~*SugarCube*~

    Great poem. the flow was nice. so much emotion. well done!!!!!!! 5/5

    ~Chelsea~

  • 16 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    Good poem...though the first stanza seemd a li'l forced...n the last stanza was sweet...some particular lines were lovely..very cute..u've expressed yourselff well...due to which...i think i can give u a 5/5
    =)
    xxPoojaxx

  • 16 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    There are some lines that i really like it.. it has a great expressing those words. there are also some lines are off for me.. but inspite of, it was still great flow. so all over i think u deserve to get 5/5 well done

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