Comments : Waiting 4 some1

  • 10 years ago

    by Jaime

    "a year has passed i really miss his noise"

    'Noise' seemed like a really odd word choice there. But I suppose for the sake of the rhyming and the flow you can't really change it.

    Other than that, great job. It was a smooth poem, easy to understand.

  • 10 years ago

    by FallenAngel

    Even i found use of word 'noice'a bit odd.. but itsa really nice poem.. simple and beautifully written.keep it up

    Bhawna

  • 10 years ago

    by danielle

    Good job!!! keep it up
    ~danielle~

  • 10 years ago

    by Melody

    WOW....thats a very beautiful poem...loved every written line...keep up the good work...5/5..your friend....*Melody*:)

  • 10 years ago

    by Wake

    That was bee-he-u-tifull ..love it...

    5/5

    ~Wake~

  • 10 years ago

    by Sanaa

    A very nice poem with a good style and powerful meaning..Am just wondering if you are native speaker or not?

  • 10 years ago

    by beautiful xx disaster

    This is amazing.
    i cant get over it.
    every word has a meaning.
    thats so powerfull.
    like "noise" its perfect.
    its an odd word that i didnt get why it was there at first.
    but then i got it.
    then poem is so ourstanding it is making me like i dont even have words for how amazing this poem is.

    keep up the good work.
    you are such a talented poet.
    <3jess

  • 10 years ago

    by Roxy

    Awww the second stanza really caught my attention, It really showed what love can do...and how love can make you do things such as wait for the one you love to return home back to you. Amazing poem keep up the great work xxx Roxy xxxx

  • 10 years ago

    by SeGrAdA

    It really caught my attention.
    so true so deep.
    great job.

  • 10 years ago

    by Shama

    U seem lyk a very gifted individual!
    Welldone,

  • 10 years ago

    by Salwa

    This poem does well for the thinker. easy to follow, yet your choice of words makes the reader dive deep into their own mind, as well as yours.......

    excellent my friend.

    salwa

  • 10 years ago

    by Finding myself

    This is a realy good poem i like it

  • 10 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Very captivating piece, greatly written and very unique, filled with emotions. You have great descriptions and imagery through the whole piece, very vivid and powerful. The repetition of the lines -deep in the dark far from the sun
    sitting alone and waiting for someone-
    is so effective it adds a lot to the great rhythm and the flow of this piece.
    Wording and rhymes are also very good.
    Keep writing!
    5/5 from me

  • 9 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    My sweet friend Adel,

    This poem I had not read before..it is your best poem I think.
    This must be about the person we talked about b4.. I truly hope and pray he will return to your life. You are such a loving and caring young man. I know that your love will overcome all obstacles in life and if you two have the courage to be friends it will be well worth it, am I right or am I right hehe???

    Your caring sister Ingridxx 5/5 as always

  • 9 years ago

    by Abu3li

    Hi

    it's a touching poem

    full of emotions full of longing

    i hope you hear soon from that one

    keep it up

    good luck
    Her Guardian

  • 9 years ago

    by likeeverafterr

    Great jobb E>

  • 9 years ago

    by xxTaegan Emilyxx

    A comment for this poem is simple;
    PERFECTLY AMAZING.
    YOU ARE AMAZING.
    consider yourself added to my fav authors, every poem i read of yours gets better and never dissapoints! :]
    keep it up
    xx
    Taegan Emily

  • 9 years ago

    by Dark Secrets

    Deep in the dark far from the sun
    sitting alone and waiting for someone
    a year has passed i haven't heard his voice
    a year has passed i really miss his noise
    under the heavy rain i am walking alone
    shouting for his name; he may return home
    the winter left and the burning summer came
    i am still standing and shouting for his name
    dust on my eyes i am almost blind
    a twister came by but he never left my mind

    omg .. this is sooo emotional... well done

  • 9 years ago

    by IML

    I love this poem! thank you for commenting on my poem. Returning the favor! =)
    Thanks
    ian

  • 9 years ago

    by XxXKristie MarieXxX

    This is really good. You should publish some of your work. I also may sugest a site called fictionpress.com yor work on that site would be so very adord as well. Keep writing.

    XxXKristie MarieXxX