This is amazing.
i cant get over it.
every word has a meaning.
thats so powerfull.
like "noise" its perfect.
its an odd word that i didnt get why it was there at first.
but then i got it.
then poem is so ourstanding it is making me like i dont even have words for how amazing this poem is.
keep up the good work.
you are such a talented poet.
Awww the second stanza really caught my attention, It really showed what love can do...and how love can make you do things such as wait for the one you love to return home back to you. Amazing poem keep up the great work xxx Roxy xxxx
Very captivating piece, greatly written and very unique, filled with emotions. You have great descriptions and imagery through the whole piece, very vivid and powerful. The repetition of the lines -deep in the dark far from the sun
sitting alone and waiting for someone-
is so effective it adds a lot to the great rhythm and the flow of this piece.
Wording and rhymes are also very good.
5/5 from me
This poem I had not read before..it is your best poem I think.
This must be about the person we talked about b4.. I truly hope and pray he will return to your life. You are such a loving and caring young man. I know that your love will overcome all obstacles in life and if you two have the courage to be friends it will be well worth it, am I right or am I right hehe???
A comment for this poem is simple;
YOU ARE AMAZING.
consider yourself added to my fav authors, every poem i read of yours gets better and never dissapoints! :]
keep it up
Deep in the dark far from the sun
sitting alone and waiting for someone
a year has passed i haven't heard his voice
a year has passed i really miss his noise
under the heavy rain i am walking alone
shouting for his name; he may return home
the winter left and the burning summer came
i am still standing and shouting for his name
dust on my eyes i am almost blind
a twister came by but he never left my mind
omg .. this is sooo emotional... well done
9 years ago
I love this poem! thank you for commenting on my poem. Returning the favor! =)