Comments : Temptation's Bait (Etheree)

  • 10 years ago

    by chavii

    Wow so meaningful, you really caught picture of todays world.Brillaintly penned.Love the choice of words.

    take care
    chavii.

  • 10 years ago

    by Melpomene

    Truely a beautiful masterpeice. I Just realise sweetie that I didnt have you on my favorites! what a mistake. Im adding you now. Back to this poem. This style you represted beautifully. An reversed Etheree right? Truely an amazing read even better write im sure. You pulled this poem off to the full extent. Well done loved it~mel

  • 10 years ago

    by Cindy

    Debbie
    What a wonderful poem. Your formed poetry always is :)
    Take care Cindy

  • 10 years ago

    by sibyllene

    *lifts eyebrow*

    As always, dear, a stylish, intelligent write. My personal favorite section was "With willful bribes polished / By tongues of sweet, sly / Deceit..." Good rhythm and alliterative feel, there.

  • 10 years ago

    by David

    Finished well. great topic. wat else can i say? the flow was controlled and the wording was fantastic.

    5/5 David

  • 10 years ago

    by debbylyn

    Good job on the etheree......as always excellent in every way! All the best, Debbie

  • 10 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    Another great poem from the great writer of P&Q, you never disappoint me with your great works,
    personaly i really love this style and i find it so hard to deal with,lol. but you have done a great job.
    keep it up dear.

  • 10 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    Wonderful write.. the flow worked well and was interesting.. the word choice was spectacular.. and the emotion was strong.. keep it up :D

  • 10 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Excellent poem. Very accurate representation of temptation and perhaps lust.

  • 10 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    Temptation is all around us, in every minute of everyday we're forced to make choices, some harder then others. I loved the poem and the meaning behind it is fantastic, we all fall to the hands of temptation sooner or later. amazing job 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Rachael

    Its a good poems you might want to write a little more or make it more relating to others
    but it was good

  • 10 years ago

    by RetroRavey

    Another beautifully written one. Thank you for your comments on mine, and yours are most excellent as well. 5/5

    Ravyn

  • 10 years ago

    by Roses and lilys

    Cool poem. I liked the format. It was different. Nice word choice and the flow was good. I gave it a 5/5.

  • Wow. this peom was great, you really have talent.

    great flow and word choice
    5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Startle Me

    Gawd.
    I love formatted poems.
    They're so.. well, structured.
    Lol.

    But this poem?
    I couldn't understand half the words.
    Meaning, nerd that I am, I had to look it up.

    Wonderful words you use.
    They're quite eccentric.

    Wish I could be as natural as you with them, though.

    PS:
    You should've PM'd me and yelled at me that I didn't do your poem.
    It wasn't cool of me. :[

  • 10 years ago

    by Fsams

    Well written and adhered to the rule. I love this form of poetry. keep it up 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Corruption

    Great poem i like this Etheree thingy looks cool lol well thanks for the comment also. good job

    keenan

  • 10 years ago

    by Georgi

    IOH OH OH!! I loved this!!
    it was so COOL!!!! like whoaaa! the vocab and imagery you used was fantastic! and i really like this style of writing, it suits you, you should write more like this! loved it!
    Geo

  • 10 years ago

    by CompletelyIncomplete

    Wow this is extremely beautiful. In fact its a new form for me. You have nicely written it. I gave a 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Mezmeryz

    Oh wow. i love your use of vocabulary, its so clever at forming images in the mind! i like the style, i dont see this one around that much. great work hun
    keep it up.
    n sorry for the late rrc =]
    nuf luv x