Comments : The Wizard

  • 11 years ago

    by .K.i.T.t.Y.

    Hmm. darn it, i cant read what others think of the "subtle message" hmmm. well ill comment first one the poeticness of it...again i like your wording....the flow was nice.

    hmm...still thinking....
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    well, i suppose there are several options.
    a) he's a pope and he is supposeda do what rules state he should do, just like those before him.
    b) he has absolutely no will power
    c) he can not resist gorgeous girls such as myself. =P kidding...

    I really don't know. Please let me know what you were thinking.

    5/5..you made me think....

  • 11 years ago

    by Robert

    I am sorry I never saw why this wizard was a wizard other then you said. You left no exsamples of his craft just that people admired him so. As for his need for women that shoulfd be self evedent for evry man needs compassion and love we all do so well Thats my opinion Plot121.

  • 11 years ago

    by Marcus

    Very interesting poem
    it really makes the reader think
    good job
    if thats what you were trying to do

  • 11 years ago

    by Vanessa

    The title drew me in i give you props for that! it is no easy task. The word choice was of course exceptional. and vocab was outstanding, but i am afraid that the mesaage was not clear to me, rather that is a blond moment on my part or what I am not too sure, But I didn't understand much about the wizzard except, that he was both well loved, and hated by many. Maybe you could explain it to me or something idk, it just din't amke alot of sense to me, but I am goi9ng to reread it before i vote.

  • 11 years ago

    by Vanessa

    I reread it, other than desire this says nothing about the wizzards behavior or how he came to be. maybe add a staza or two explaining a few things would help, for people who just aren't getting it. Idk just trying to be honest

  • 11 years ago

    by Fsams

    The poem flows well but i am very skeptical about the meaning in it. I would have been better with more lucidity i feel. its good and 4/5 despite the fact that it seemed little ambiguous.

  • 11 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    I don't think I really grasped the concept behind this poem, it doesn't really state much about the wizard. The flow was good again and the word choice as well, the title is also eye catching. all in all great job 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    I didn't finish reading this poem. I got distracted by the colors of the page.

    Honestly, you need to make an impact on the reader quickly before they click off the page. Had I not owed you a comment, I would have bypassed this poem instantly. I don't really know what to say. I feel bad for not being able to read this one... I only hope your next will be better.

    I suggest you start off with a thought-provoking first line... something that will amaze the reader. Something that has 8 or 9 syllables. If you ever edit this poem, message me saying so and I will come back and read it =]

    ~Stephen White

  • 11 years ago

    by Romancing the Darker Side

    I like the hidden meaning, it gave something extra to the poem.
    Strong vocabulary, very colourful.
    I like the story of sorts you have set up. Very nice work.

  • 11 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    I don't get it sorry.. Maybe its just me but anyway. Word choice is superb as always, I like title of the poem - its really catchy. flow was okay. good job

  • 11 years ago

    by Jacqui Armstrong

    I didnt get the hidden meaning at all really...
    you didnt add enough depth into the poem to actually allow people to look into it... (if that makes any sence) also part way through it becomes a little hard to keep reading...

    still well done for trying... it is good but defo not 1 of you best!

    Jacs