A sad, and very emotional poem. You certainly made it appealing and made yourself speak out through the words. Great job and take care.
cheers, josh

Aw hun really you can't know how sad I became..I wish nothing had become to you...But you know world is full of jerks..all around the world..And he will get what he deserves..Believe me dear
I'm always with you
Don't ever forget that
Your everlasting sis
Laura

This poem is very strong and has a lot of emotion in it. I like the stanza scheme you used where you would leave it hanging and then come back with the sentence. The flow was excellent and was carried all the way from the beginning to the end, same with the rhyme. Well done and remember, no one should tell someone else how to run their life and no one should control someone else.

Peace, Poetry & Power,

Nick

Beautiful poem ...... i could feel the emotion ..... well penned ..... 5/5

keep it the great writting

Chan
-xx-

WOW... Nessa... thats really deep. I hope that actually didnt happen. If so... I am sorry to hear that it did. And that you get you Revenge... 5/5

Lovely poem mate. very into depth.
i saw a mistake though.
you typed 'lokked' instead of 'looked'.
anyway 5/5.

Very emotional.
Hope it didn't happened for real.
Beautiful written.
Take care.

This poem was so deep and heart breaking.
it was so emotional.

you took away inocence...
something i will never regain
you tried to hold me...
with my body twisted in pain

just loved this stanza.
best wishes
and take care

Oh my, this is so powerful! Great poem with strong imagery.
This piece hold so much emotions.
Every line is superbly written.
5/5

Hmm. i think this should go in the explicit area. and reread it for typos. other than that, good job.

This poem was truely amazing. i really dont know what to say, but this was amazing. i love the end. excellent job.
--TheGothicAlbino

Very sad was this ture but its a nice peom