Awww! The part of telling the teacher that this person fell of a swing was so sad. So much emotion in one poem, great job! You made me feel the feelings in this poem, a truly great feat indeed. Keep it up, 5/5! Yay!

Hatori
The Illusionist

I like this one :) very realistic

This poem is amazing. I love the way you wrote this. I love the meaning also.

Hey,
Your poem is great and it has alot of potential but it needs some work. try to keep your rhyming in ABAB format it flows alot better and it makes things better to understand i can really visualise the ending though. its something i would write.
Keep writing
-Kamille

Yeh this is pretty good sweety, keep it up 5/5 sad tho :( x

It a good poem and there are places where you can add some more detail like why you have the bruises and scrapes but in my opinion it a very good poem keep it up ~hand~

Sounds more like a rap then a poem im not dissing it i like it :)

It's alright..

Living in abuse is hard. I hope you know that if you ever need some one talk to you can pm me or email me. my hotmail is
girlkarateka@hotmail.com
I check both my pm and hotmail at least once a day so I promise I respond quickly to anyting that needs a quick and urgent reply.
By the way I believe every message regardless of the contentent.

A very sad and intense poem ,reflecting pain through your well choosen words.Good write.
keep writing.

chavii.

Interesting poem, it is sad but good... i think you could put more feeling into this poem but you still did a good job

-love whitney-

For a short poem, it has a lot of emotion packed into it. It speaks of fear and the pain and hurt of being abused. And the fear of what will happen if you tell someome. The only way to stop the cycle is to speak up. Nice word choice and flows pretty smoothly. 5/5

Much Love,
.:Danielle:.

Excellent poem, very short but meaningful.

This on esi great.. of course it is good... J'aime beaucoup

Thiz is 4 gud p03m

But very well written

Well, I'm not one to make things better than they seem.
So here goes.
This poem, is completely elementary. It's good in a way. But it needs a lot more detail.
It needs a lot of work.
And the point of view isn't as clear as it should be. Neither is the point of the whole poem itself.
I'm sorry if that offended you in any way, but it needed to be said.
Keep writing.
~Grace

Awesome poem

Awww...this poem is sooo sad. I hope this isn't really happening to you!!!!!

Very nice. Deep. Strong. Get's you thinking.