Wow that was truly great and nice format, rhyme scheme and nice poem basically 5/5 maybe u can read one of mine.

Hey i like it, it sad and beautiful

Thats really good i like love it even lol keep it up darl xoxox

This was a very deep and emotional poem and I really liked it. A lot of people can relate, my only critique is that it seems like your trying to force your rhymes a little, but other than that its superb. Marvelous.
<3Raych

thanks for commenting on my poem

Thanks for all the comments
i appreciate them

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bridget

Beautiful poem.
Very emotional, very sad.
Good flow and rhyming.

" People around me do not care
Never help me with the pains I bear
No one in my dreams will save my life
For there is no reason for me to survive. "

My favourite stanza.
Beautiful written.
Take care

Sad<<<<<:(

Love this
xx

That was a great poem. It really touches my heart. "People around me do not care, never help me with the pains I bear?" These words really gave effect to your poem...And they were written for my life. "I wander through days and nights, looking for a certain light. The one who will let me know, when will darkness let me go" This really emphasized the need for someone to save you from your sorrow. Great choice of words. 5/5