Ok the second and last stanza have some gramatical errors
but otherwise the poem was really sad
and ppl should really read this
i loved it
5/5
kaila

This was amazing. Your emotion was soo strong. The flow was perfect. You had me captivated with your words!
Once again, great job!
5/5
((Amber))

So sad yet to common...its a shame so many are abandoned and i can definetly realte to this. the poem was perfectly written i felt all the emotion, thought sorrowful it was. 5/5

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Wow as i read this poem all i can think about was myself cuzz this is me i feel like sometimes i am this gurl.....i love you poem

Wow great consecutive rhymes and perfect flow. The stanzas are very cohesive and the way words strung each other is great. You have kep it really nice with overflowing mournful feelings :)

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Fsams

Wow that was great poem , I love the emotion the loneliness that is inline in this poem, I love the flow and the rhythem of the poem, really well penned and a very nice piece keep it up

gene Ross

A deep emotional feelings that most of us has felt at some point of life, but i totaly loved your poem as it hold great truth.

5/5 thats a really nice poem

I think it's a good poem.. Very emotional.. Flow was smooth, Keep up the good work.

Very emotional. I love it!

Dont! pls?

Very amazing! The emotion was very sad! I liked specially the ending. And its so true how people don't notect anything/don't help till they loose that dear person, Many can relate to this!
Keep writing 5/5 :)

This is full of emotion!
She wants someone special,
To help take away her pain.
No one stays long enough,
To see her life strain.
this feels like it comes from a heart its full of emotion it has strong words!

Alright job. The rhyming was decent, but there was nothing to me that set this poem apart from the hundred others just like it that I've read. I went through a period like this in my writing and life too, just hang in there, things do get better. Also, as you learn to step outside of yourself more, your poetry will improve.

Great depth and emotion. The poem itself is very powerful and touching. The flow for me seemed off in a few places, but no big deal. Still 5/5

marcella

I understand completely what your going through.
im going through the same thing.
these guys in my life.
are all just a bunch of jerks. "/
excellent poem though :]]
5/5.

Again another sad piece. You write with such ease about the pain. You draw the reader into your poem as if though they are actually there witnessing the whole scene unfolding.

"She always messes up,
Never does anything right.
She holds in inside during the day,
And cuts her wrists every night."

In the third line of this stanza I think it would sound better if you wrote She holds it inside

Just my thoughts hun.

Overall another lovely piece written.

--Sher

Great poem. it's easy to read and flows well. it's very sad and you convey the emotions well.

The start and ending fit out right...i enjoyed it very much...you really grab my attention..that why ill give 5/5