Comments : A Lifeless Portrait (Pantoum)

  • 11 years ago

    by Cindy

    I love to read your formed poetry. This one is really awesome.

    On a cold winter's eve it all began;
    By his portrait, my soul's desire was warmed.
    No more than once I beheld this man,
    Whose languid gaze held much pleasant charm.

    I love the imagery and word choices in this piece. Excellent write.
    Love Cindy

  • 11 years ago

    by Dying Beautifully

    This is one of my favs by you it's awesome it kept me interested and I am rereading it over and over again jsut for the pleasure of it that's how much I like it!!Lol

    Great writting

  • 11 years ago

    by Dixiedaisy

    This was awesome! An awesome use of vocabulary and I was really drawn into your work. Amazing job on making this sound so distinguished and the form you used was great. Absolutely loved this great job.

  • 11 years ago

    by Tricky Daze

    I liked the form and the word usage here and there..It was so meaningful and your advanced wording absouletely made it perfect to read

    My fave lines are;

    On sketch, moment in ancient times endured,
    Avid dash of fury cloaked death's plateau.

    Keep it up dear,

  • 11 years ago

    by S0u10fS0rr0w

    Tis a hard style to accomplish and you did excellent debbers, love the ending, i give this pantoum a perfect 5/5!!! keep them coming!!!

  • 11 years ago

    by Adelle

    This poem is written very well you have a unique style and your poems have a lot of emotion however I fell the title could have been given a little more. Your poem proves that you are a very accomplished poet which unfortunately makes your title a seam a little clumsy.

  • 11 years ago

    by Hebe

    An other great poem of yours.
    I've heard of this form before, I wanted to try it sometimes myself, but it seems so difficult.
    But you did a great job.
    A good flow and a good word choice.
    I really enjoyed reading it.
    I look forward to read more of your work.
    Take care

  • 11 years ago

    by Corruption

    This is amazing
    must have taken some time to complete
    with there being so many rules to follow for it
    i think ill have to try this kind some time lol
    okay well wonderful job


  • 11 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    Not enough words to describe this great poem, as always you have been a great writer who always touch my heart....
    thank you for sharing this great poem, and a 5/5 from me as it really deserve it...

  • 11 years ago

    by Brittney

    I've never came across this form on this site before. I like the poem though. Very well written. The words are very descriptive and help to paint an image.
    great write!

  • 11 years ago

    by Phil

    Really beautiful piece Debbie, I've never read that sort of poem before but hey5/5, great job.

  • 11 years ago

    by Leah20

    Amazing job! I love your poetry. Your vocabulary is just amazing and everything flows so wonderfully. You're an amazing writer!

  • 11 years ago

    by ECILA ice

    Honestly i'm not familiar with the different types of poems but i can say that this one is so amazing and caught my interest..v great work it flow smoothly can't find any flaws in here. I admire your chosen words it on how it jive with the intense emotions held in every lines. Great job!!

  • 11 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    I thought the poem was written so very well and I can't believe this poem isn't 5/5 overall. Not only the word choice but the imagery alone is outstanding. Truly one of your better writes 5/5 by far GG23

  • 11 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This pantoum was well written The content is very enchanting and word blended perfectly.

  • 11 years ago

    by Mandz and Aly

    I like this poem its very well...honestly i think you tried to hard to make this poem what it is....very nice poem just seems more like something you had to write not something that came from the heart...but it was good i did like it...Manda

  • 11 years ago

    by Miu

    Beautiful! Vocabulary was amazing. and emotions, i dont know why but it made me all soft inside. Love the imagery. A flawless piece just really. Loved everything in it.

  • 11 years ago

    by Chelsey

    Marian I aboslutly loved this style! You wrote this so well I can't described how much I liked reading this from write excellently!!!....

  • 11 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    Omg.. this poem is perfect! it has all the poetic essence in it, Fantastic job! your word choice is really impressive. You're a great writter.

    5/5 as always

  • 11 years ago

    by XXTruthSeekerXX

    Very creative poem. I love the topic of finding something deep within a "lifeless portrait" keep it up