Comments : Winds of Change

  • 10 years ago

    by Rose not your average

    Dance, Dance my child
    Dark, Daunting, Wild
    Sleep, Sleep my son
    Life but just begun.
    this was full of something unspoken and said but you could feel a message or something! i really loved and enjoyed this poem! this is defienently a 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by TwiztidJuggalette

    Wow..This was really deep, It was written so beautifully too.. The flow was just amazing through out the whole thing and the wording was so amazing..Just right...I loved the ending also...

    5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Debbie

    It is a nicely-written, engaging read. The seeming correlation of the gustiness of the winds of trials and challenges to an emotional outburst truly capture my interest in the poem. At first I took it as one of the consequences of premarital sex: single-parenthood, whereas it could be interpreted in every way possible. The pitch was poignant and emotions refined and well conveyed. I truly enjoyed this piece, Leah. All the best!

  • 10 years ago

    by swill

    Thank god this one's not cliched...I loved the uniqueness and the wonderful wording....

    I'm too bored to post in the thread, so can you please do my poem winds of change , too hehe

  • 10 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Greatly written piece, it is so powerful, and very dark. I like the choice of words in it. The fourth stanza is my favorite. I like the title, too, it's very captivating.
    Well done, 5/5 from me

  • 10 years ago

    by Sourav

    Fantastic! Wonderfully written poem! Worth reading!

  • 10 years ago

    by Synh

    Excellent poem by my standards. The flow was awesome and the rhyming rocked my socks off.

    Just one itsy bitsy thing. Your 4th stanza... the rhyming didn't match the rest of the poem and that threw me off just a bit.

    I loved how instead of using 'over' you used 'o'er'. You don't see many people who can do that with certain words and still have their poem sound believable.

    Excellent job. You've got real talent :)

  • 10 years ago

    by Catastrophic Beauty

    //* Excellent write. Very deep and dark. Amazing imagery too. The rhyming was good also and the flow was flawless,,*

    Keep it up && Take care!

    -Shannon <3

  • 10 years ago

    by Crystal Gaze

    This poem is breathtaking, the flow was flawless, and the wording amazing.
    I can't explain how this poem made me feel, almost like it will always go unspoken.
    And excellent Write,
    And a memorable read,
    5/5 Elaine.

  • 10 years ago

    by Maria

    Oh wow! I love this poem. And Im not just saying that. I hope I can write as good as you one day. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by SuicideNotes2Poems

    Hmmmm realy realy nice job
    i read it in a slow type of way and that just made it even better =]
    and i loved the great vocab it made it have an even more dark affect nice job =]
    5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Adelle

    This is one of the best poems I have read and I always try and leave honest comments I would love it if you could pm me some time so that we could talk about where you get ur insperation from as I would be really intrested flawless poem i'm adding you to my favorites list.

  • 10 years ago

    by Mandz and Aly

    Wow nice poem i really like it...keep up the good work Manda

  • 10 years ago

    by unknown

    The words are wonderful... Eyecathing and breathetaking...
    Very great.. Although I didn't get the flow.. ^^
    Beautifully penned.. Well done..
    This poem deserve 5/5.. :)

  • 10 years ago

    by Letty

    Wow..That was really deep. I don't usually comment on dark poems, but this one was magnificent. I was captivated from the beginning of the poem to the end. You really dug deep down in your dark space, lol. I really loved reading this.

    Thank you for sharing it. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Veamm

    It rhymes so well..honestly i don't get the picture..to who it dedicated to?

    by the way..you have deep words and that good!!
    5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by Mel

    This is really good.
    they rhyme is great and the imagery and words you used is awesome. good job.

  • 9 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This has an outstanding flow with a great choice of woerds to present the images and the theme

  • 9 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Wonderful write..

    "Sky fades into tomorrow
    Everlasting, impressing sorrow
    Dark, Macabre, Dancing free
    Prevailing winds, our enemy"
    ^^ loved this stanza the most... their is something captivating about it..

    "Dance, Dance my child
    Dark, Daunting, Wild
    Sleep, Sleep my son
    Life but just begun."
    ^^ the repeation of words has added more impact..

    great job...

  • 9 years ago

    by FaithHopeNLove

    Wow! Your poem is so vivid and so strong!! Very dramatic, and a pleasing read, despite the confusion i experienced over the specific topic at first. I love it! Wonderful ideas, elquent writting skills, simply beautiful. Fantastic!