It was so intresting as the topic and the feeling on this poem was good
I especially liked;

I'm sorry I'm such a disappointment
I'm sorry you don't want your son
but most of all I'm sorry
because i hate you and mum

Beatifully penned,
Laura

An excellent topic to write on. It happens a lot. Great portray of emotion on your brothers part.
I have a question though,

"i think about what to say
yet I'm not sure how too
how to tell him I've fallen in love
and I've fallen for you"

Who has he fallen for? I didn't understand.

Greta xo

5/5

Wow!! this is good!! nice poem..
and I am actually touched with the flow of your poem..

So far,a unique topic coz i've never read a poem before and it was nice coz you have describe the feeling very well. and i can it, the loneliness and the pain your bro were keeping...

And as if i can feel the loneliness and the pain your bro

It was a good poem, I can feel that this poem really means a lot to you.. I think it flowed well. you have some minor errors..
= Just capitalize all the I's :)

Nonetheless a good read.
I hope your father will forgive your brother.. Just give it time :)

Aww,
omg this poem was so amazing.
The flow was fantastic and the meaning, I feel myself shaking. This poem is so unique and unbelievable. You made it come out of your soul, and writing about someone else too. That just shows that you are a writer, a true writer. Being able to write in another's perspective and making it sound so real. You are soo amazing!!!
I loved it, 5/5

The peice was penned beautifully, especially considering you where writting it from another's point of veiw.
It was captivating, and very emotional.
I really enjoyed it,
5/5 Elaine.

It's so great.. So meaningful.. Eyecathing as well.. :)
The title is attractive enough to make people read your poem.. :)
You put a strong emotion in this poem..
I love the last stanza.. Nice.. You do it well..
beautifully done..
5/5

Aww, that'S a sweetTpoeM! I likE iT :)

luzaN

Hey nice poem! It really touched my feelings! KEEP IT UP 5/5 :))

I enjoyed while reading your poem. 5/5

Wow. now that had a powerful message behind it. it was nicely penned. to tell you the truth, i have never read a poem on this topic before. i loved it. it is a subject that is rarely touched and you portrayed your message perfect. 5/5

Oh its a sad poem!
i loved it though!
the rhyming was good the flow and you could feel the emoiton!
5/5

This was a really beautiful poem, but heartbraking how intolerance and unforseen disagreements can break up a family. i agree with rose not your average - the rhyming and flow were perfect, and the emotions came through clearly! 5/5

It was very good. The rhyming stopped in that third stanza though which was a little weird. I'll give it a four.

It had me from the 1st wrd. I love this b/c it is so tru.

Well this poem is pretty good. but you have one stanza that throws it all of, which is also the only stanza that makes sense to me too. the messed up stanza has 5 lines and all the others have 4. it is a great poem though. the flow was good untill that stanza. 4/5

This was a good poem. I'm against same sex couples though because I'm a religious person. But this poem was sad. You had a lot of grammar mistakes also that you should really fix.

-Shannon <3

Thats a wicked poem really nicely wrote :) top marks!