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two of your verses rhyme and two don't i don't know if that is how it how you wrote it but it is a bit confusing.
otherwise good poem
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Wow the imagry is amazing you can really write :)

ashleigh

It was good, but there were a few spelling issues, and I would have put punctuations in different places from how I read it. The word choice was great in that it painted a dark dreary picture and there was emotion felt throughout the poem. Good work.

Wow!!! It is so powerful, wording is great and you created amazing atmosphere. Very original and filed with emotions. I like the rhythm of this piece, I don't prefer love poetry, but this piece isn't a classic love poem which is great. It is so unique and you truly wrote it greatly. Well done!

Aside from the spelling, you did a good job. i liked the way that it didnt all rhyme and it was well written too.
good job
Tara-Kay
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I have never read a breaking up poem like that. It was more sad for me than love. Great imagery you show here. Very nice wordying. Very emotional, atmosphere really strong.
Great write!
Keep it up! 5/5

First thing that caught my thoughts on is the imagination you have that uniqueness in describing your ideas and emotions.. it was a sad poem but not really so vivid to me. there is one spelling error which is chokeing i think it should choking.. aside from that it was nice.. keep it up

I can see that you have used the poetic licence in this piece. I mean to say that there is no word called chokeing (choking is the word) but you can still use it to make the poem flow well and go along with the rhythm. Your poem is very poetic and there is quality in the lexical density. I will give you 5/5

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Fsams

Im feeling that u can write very well great work

I liked this piece alot it was quite eerie but to me it needed to be in the dark section or maybe even sad. I know this is about lost love but it seems more dark then sad. I loved your word choice they are deep and hold such powerful emotions. This poem was quite capturing and didn't bore me at all. Loved the start and loved the ending. Well done an enjoyable read. ~Mel

You're so talented.
Once again, amazing poem.
I hate that though, Lol.
Not that it's so good, well yes that it's so good.
People get mad because of my 'one liners' saying, AMAZING POEM. keep it up.
lol.
but i'm 100% honest.
promise.

Great use of words your very good great poem

Interesting choice to place this one in the love category...its true, love can almost destroy us, whether it be for better or for worse, and you did an excellent job portaying that, great job!

andrew

Great poem!!! I really liked it...

I absolutely loved this poem definately 5.5 for me
such a cretive and abstract image.
i wish more poems were of this quality.

Your awesome

i love this poem its crazy how you can see everything going down your use of words are amazing

you rock =]]

Tami

The description in this poem was done quite well the images were great but the core message seemed a bit hazy other then that a good read Plot121