Comments : I've lost all track of time

  • This is a bit weird, but I liked it. 5/5

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  • 10 years ago

    by Bret Higgins

    You know I thought I'd drop in, see another piece of trite teenage hard drive filler, give them some advice on flow and structure and BAM! I got smacked in the head by a real poem.

    I say this with one hundred percent sincerity; THANK YOU.

    Bret

  • 10 years ago

    by Wings Of Flames

    Hmmm. something to think about. keep writing kiddo. very abstract very complicatedly smple which doesnt make sense.

    >.<
    5.5

  • 10 years ago

    by Miu

    Very creative, it's just blews mind away, because I'm really thinking what are you trying to say with this piece. But amazing thought you put in there.
    5/5 Keep writing!

  • 10 years ago

    by xXxemzxXx

    Great poem its very creative it gives people something to think about as well i loved it amazing write :)

    --emz--

  • 10 years ago

    by Shinobi

    A very interesting piece. The choosing of words here is unique. The whole subject is different. I like it, but it could be longer 4/5

  • 9 years ago

    by Ash

    A really unique piece of writing. Even the topic is quite different from the norm, The flow was good and the simplicity of the poem just added more effect. 5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Wow... this is excellently written...
    really... the word flow and the concept...everything great..
    I really liked it..

  • 9 years ago

    by The Queen

    ANother wow..Simply words and simply written yet complicate my mind..That was excellent...Very unique and brilliant imagery from you...Good job..