Beloved dream;

by Jess   Jan 23, 2008


Shes lost and cant find her way out;
She finds nobobys about,
She knows shes all alone...
But why ? Just why ? She wonders..
Why am i alone ?
What did i do ?
Finally she sees;
Oh my god hes walking toward me!
&& no other girl is here for him too see.
Oh why is this happening to me ?
He grabs her by her waste and just holds her,
Her eyes well up as he tells her...
i love you.
But then she trys to talk
then she finds herself in shock..
Her eyes slowly open up;
She finds herself in bed,
With her alarm going off..

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  • 12 years ago

    by L

    I found the poem a bit confusing.
    and the part that confused me is that i do't know which girl was grabbed by the waist by the guy. Whether the other girl or her.

    Because you are stating that she is wondering so you use the I or me.
    Later on, you talk about a girl. so I thought that you might have to be referring to her through the rest of the poem. Rather than the first gal.

    But what i think you were trying to say was that the girl was having the a great time just to find out that it was a dream. She was dreaming of being alone yet she sees this guy approaching her and she is shock because there was another girl and he choice her over the other.

    Correct me if I'm wrong. I would appreciate it.

  • 12 years ago

    by Jessica

    Love this one I can understand what you mean in it very nice keep it up

  • 13 years ago

    by LiNa

    I liked this one, it has emotion behind it. love it.good job

  • 13 years ago

    by RainbowSlider

    That is an awesome poem.

  • 13 years ago

    by Patricia

    I really liked this poem! you have talent.. keep it up :)