Comments : Catching the Wind

  • 16 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    I love the first sentence "White mist whips around me". The title was the perfect choice for this poem, and the ending was cool. Nice Job!

  • 15 years ago

    by Sora

    Wow! this was so beauitful. you have a great talent. this poem was quite pure and heartfelt. wonderful write. job well done. 5/5.

    -Ashlei.

  • 15 years ago

    by Lovely Bones

    This is very beautifully written. I love the imagery, especially the first two lines, and I love the last line as well. The only thing that I don't understand is when you said, "I allow my anger to rise" or something like that. Maybe I have to read it a few more times to really understand, but overall it is a very good poem! I look forward to reading more of your stuff. You seem to have a very interesting mind, which I like :)

  • 15 years ago

    by Gabba Gabba Hey

    I really like this poem, but I do have at least one suggestion for you.
    In all of the A lines, you had something or an action, and in the B you had something that made sense with it and started with 'I' I loved that, it reminds me of a poem I wrote a long time ago...except it wasn't 'I' it was something else.
    Anyway, one of the lines is 'no one can know my burden' or something like that, I feel this broke your rhythm and such. Otherwise, you had a lot of nice touches.
    The imagery is amazing, and that's what really makes a poem.
    The last line is a nice culmination and adds reason and purpose to rest of the poem.
    A great write!