The last line might flow better if it was: Lusting yesteryears or Before lusting yesteryears. Your weakest paragraph was: your second, I don't know if it's because it sounded a bit awkward or because you didn't explain what freedom the narrator lacked. Other than that I did like the poem, you gave a bit more than the one side the narrator explains, but I would have loved to know what innocence was lost.

Hmmm interesting,

I liked it because it was so descriptive,

but it needs somthing else in it,
the flow lost on some spots,

and this poem doesin't require rhyming, I dunno exactly what it needs, maybe needs to be longer?

over all good job on it though!

Keep writing.

"My conscience craves for the times
Of my ignorant desires
Before depression ruled my heart
From being broken by those liars"

^ I absolutely love this stanza. Mostly for the reason that I can relate myself. :)

The flow was flawless, the emotions were intense, and your word choice was amazing. Beautiful job! :) Overall: 5.5

- Steph.

First I want to say yay for a new poem =) And even more yay because it's awesome, I can really relate to it, longing for the past. My favourite stanza is definitely:

"My soul yearns for my childhood
For the times when promises weren't broken
When tears were so obscure
And no words were left unspoken."

Just beautiful. 5/5

Em xXx

Wow! thats soo goo! i love the how well it flows, you really captured the theme! Great job! I love the last stanza too, excelent!!

My soul yearns for my childhood
For the times when promises weren't broken
When tears were so obscure
And no words were left unspoken.

That is soo beautiful it has so much emotion... this poem is wonderfully written and the flow is excellent, also i could relate to it very well, 5/5 Great Job

My soul yearns for my childhood
For the times when promises weren't broken
When tears were so obscure
And no words were left unspoken.

That is soo beautiful it has so much emotion... this poem is wonderfully written and the flow is excellent, also i could relate to it very well, 5/5 Great Job

Your title sure caught my attention.. and i like its meaning.. even if people didnt know what it meant, probably by the end of the poem they would have an idea.. i like how it all just flowed from the heart.. good write ^_^

~angel~

I really liked the first and third stanzas..it gives a feeling of a poisoned world...its very deep and intriquet

I liked the title. Simple but the word in it's own holds a lot of meaning.

First stanza: Well, the word "wanna" kinda threw me off. Idk why. But the meaning behind the whole stanza was suttle and a feeling that a lot of people can relate to. Another thing, the mood or attitude that I felt was very calm and relaxed...

Second: The flow is smooth. Amazingly smooth. In the second line I think that maybe another word should be used instead of "want." The meaning of the poem is strong and the word choice should be too. Overall a great stanza though.

Third: Oh boy. I love this stanza. Wow. The flow was sooo smooth and the meaning was just ah-mazing. I mean wow. Your word choice was great and the hatred expressed is so clear and just wonderful. Love it <3

Fourth: Another great stanza. No complaints with this one. Smooth flow was great rhyme scheme. Love the story line. Beautiful my dear.

+ A side note. I must say that when the poem started it was kinda weak. But as goes on it is becoming stronger and stronger. Which is great...

Back to the poem, last stanza: This was a beautiful way to sum up the poem. Again, no complaints. Your flow remained smooth and the word yesteryears was wow. I loved it. So overall, a great poem hun. 5.5

Amber +.

Excellent flow good job 5/5

Excellent flow good job 5/5

Oh I just loved this! You spoke such truth ... I too miss the innocence of my childhood years. Things seemed so much easier back then and you described that pining flawlessly.

"For the times when promises weren't broken
When tears were so obscure
And no words were left unspoken. "
^So easy for me to relate with this ... beautifully done.

Well done *5/5*

Nice i like this part
"My heart pines for the distant past
That so quickly disappeared
For the times of such simplicity
Before lusting the yesteryears"
it's a cute, sinister poem. i like it a lot and the flow was well kept. your choice of vocabulary was great, and those words worked well with the poem. 5/5 !props!

Well it was a good poem, I think it flowed well. I have some suggestions though... Try to use some punctuations in this poem. Well maybe it's just me but I find it a poem more interesting if there are punctuations in it :) For me punctuations are like the tune of the poem. Remember this is just my opinion. :)

*It's just a suggestion*

Anyway I enjoyed reading it, keep up the good work!

I thought it was a really great poem. I liked the flow and the rhyming was also very good.

"My conscience craves for the times
Of my ignorant desires
Before depression ruled my heart
From being broken by those liars"

Favorite Stanza ^^

I also thought the end was good. Your vocab was good, and it was a well deserved 5/5

Wow...
I can deeply relate to this poem.
Amazing piece, excellently written from the beginning to the end. It sounds so sincere, like it's written straight from the heart which makes it so remarkable. Whole poem is filled with greatly expressed melancholy and sorrow.
My favorite stanza is:

- My soul yearns for my childhood
For the times when promises weren't broken
When tears were so obscure
And no words were left unspoken.-

Keep writing, you have a way with words.'

5/5 from me

Amazing o_0

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I can really relate- good job!

...facinating...really, it's so true.