Apathetic Heart

Very nice,like the line:Surrounded by people
Who care to much
Don't want to be like them
So I have an apathetic heart.
-caring always ends in pain,really feel youre emotions in this

This poem was all right, but maybe you shoud've added more stanzas in this. In the second stanza, the last line didn't seem to fit there. It's pretty good, though, but the repetition on the first and third stanza made the poem kind of confusing, which is why should probably make it a bit longer.

.:CiNdY:.

I loved the way you worded this poem! I can really relate to the whole thing about being around people who care too much.

Oh, and grammar........."care to much" should be care too much".

5/5

The content is great! :) Your word choice is once again spot on & this would be my favourite poem of yours so far. I'm not positive on the concept/story but I still liked it!

Ally. x

I'm not sure if i understand the concept of this poem.
What i got from it, was someone who chose not to care, because caring is too much, it is too hurtful.
I hope i got it right.
5/5