Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh wawwwwww
its full of feeling of love you cant have
and in simple words and nice flow you paint me a pic that i never forgot,i wish that you can find new one that love you in the way you should be loved, i also write about love if you got time have alook i think you will like it.

Awww this was so sad and heartbreaking for me because the same thing has happened to me! When you spoke of wanting to confess your love to him but are scared of how he feels in return I was like "WOW could that be anymore like my life." The flow here was just flawless and this has to be my fave poem I've read today and trust me I've read A LOT. This one touched my heart so deeply and I appalud you on opening yourself up. Well done *5/5*

Suggestion: I would change the title to something a little more unique to catch the reader's eye and make them have to read the poem just to know what it's about. Hehe.

But then you catch a glimpse of reality,

^^ Best line in the whole poem. Or at least I think so.

I thought this was very relatable, if not a little cliche. I would add a touch or originality, but that's just me. Overall I think it was pretty good and I myself have felt like that a time or two, as I'm sure a lot of people have. That's what makes this poem one a lot of people will like. So great job with that. :]]

Keep it up and keep writing!
Cayce

And what girl in their teenage years has never had this situation. very well wrote and very expressive, can't find any fault with it. apart from you can jazz it up a little. give it a buzzzz if ya get me

OMG its great poem , i realy enjoy reading every word,so deep feeling and i'm sorry that you feel like that,i wish if everything goes okay and you will find the true love in your way,nice flow ,well done 5/5

Amazing start , thinking the same way !!!:)

good work

I can relate to this poem and it is very well written 5/5

Beautifully written..

I like the way you have asked questions and then answered them as well...

"But then you catch a glimpse of reality,
And realize he doesn't feel the same.
As you see him kiss the girl he loves,
You sigh and hang your head down in shame. "
^^ hey thay is very sad... but beautifully written..

great write..

keep writing..

"Have you ever loved someone,
But that person doesn't know?
Ever wanted to say "boy I love you"
But you never let it show."
-Oh, yes! Wow, I can already relate. Right from the start. I'm in this situation right now in my life. I know I'm going to enjoy this poem!

"You know you're with someone,
But you don[']t want it to last.
Because you can[']t get that boy off your mind,
You can't fo[r]get about your past."
-Wow, this poem is one of those poems that I'm sure a ton of people could relate to. Which is why I'm enjoying it a lot. :) I put in brackets the things you missed.

"Have you ever needed someone,
But don't know if they need you too?
Ever wanted to say "do you see me?"
Because in my dreams I always see you."
-Oh my goodness. Nice. :)

"You know in your mind that it is wrong,
And that it could never be.
But in your soul and in your heart,
You completely disagree."
-I Totally relate. :]

"Have you ever cared so dearly,
For the person who broke your heart once before?
Ever wanted to scream to the top of your lungs,
"Every day I need you more and more!"
-Again, people can relate to this. Nice work.

"But then you catch a glimpse of reality,
And realize he doesn't feel the same.
As you see him kiss the girl he loves,
You sigh and hang your head down in shame."
-I love these lines. So relatable.

Overall, excellent write. So many people can relate to this poem! Way to go! 5/5.

This is a fantastic poem to read. The flow went so well that I never had to retrace my steps while reading it. The rhymes work excellent and the message is very clear. A very conceptual and wonderful poem. Excellent!

I can relate with this so much. i underdatnd completely where your coming from. i loved reading this. excellent job.

I feel I'm going to be a little biased judging this poem, because I'm really not one for romance/longing for love poems. They just aren't my thing. The poem itself isn't bad, not at all. It could be better, though. I feel there could be more emotion portrayed, to give it a more poetic feel. For example, take your last stanza:

"But then you catch a glimpse of reality,
And realize he doesn't feel the same.
As you see him kiss the girl he loves,
You sigh and hang your head down in shame."

Instead of this, you could make it flow a lot better with more... tranquility, if you like. My suggestion:

"Catching a glimpse of reality,
His feelings, you see, aren't the same.
He turns, kissing the girl he truly loves,
Walking away, you hang your head in shame."

^^ My suggestion isn't all that great, either. >.< Haha. [There's a reason I don't really like this kind of poetry; I suck at it. :P] However, I do feel like you could put more emotion into your work. Tell a story, but make it flow more beautifully. :]

Wow. a beautifully expressed write!! i loved every single word. yer a wonderful writer, keep up the lovely work!

"You sigh and hang your head down in shame."
i liked this line, but i think it fits better without using down and just saying head in shame
in a few places it seems like a stretch to rhyme the words in success.
i know this played my mind and heart. i felt this once. and its hard to get over.
"Have you ever needed someone,
But don't know if they need you too?
Ever wanted to say "do you see me?"
Because in my dreams I always see you."
this stanza started great, but the interest kind of degenerated when you repeated words a bunch and you played in another game for a few seconds.
"But then you catch a glimpse of reality,
And realize he doesn't feel the same.
As you see him kiss the girl he loves,
You sigh and hang your head down in shame. "
the heartbreaking stanza. perfectly placed. perfectly understood. perfectly ending a great piece.
wonderful!
i loved it

Lexie

Great choice of words n lovely flow. Ur poem is wel structured n sequenced. I wud suggest u 2 correct the typos. tc

I liked this. It's sweet, but it's sad. There were a few lines that stood out to me.

"Because you cant get that boy off your mind,
You can't foget about your past."

^^ "cant" -- can't. "foget" -- forget.

"Ever wanted to say "do you see me?"
Because in my dreams I always see you."

^^ I LOVED those lines. They're my favourite two in the whole piece.

Overall; I really liked it. You've written a good poem. Good job.

5/5

``Briana

Really a great poem. very nice flow and nice wording, with maybe one little, tiny exception; Because you cant get that boy off your mind.

Somehow this line didn't seem right in the poem to me. just didn't mesh in well...just my opinion