Whoa I just lovved the ending. Every girl wishes to have that one guy that will stick up for them no matter what and this poem was a perfect example. I loved how you expressed your emotions.

one part that confused me was ..
"You you turn on your skin."

Other then that welll done. *5/5*

Nice work i love it and how the pain to love someone not yours,but i love that you write about it and try to face it,well done

Good job.

The ending of the poem really brought it all together. And it's a very true statement. But I guess sometimes you can't help who you love, You're not really suppose to..

It was written really well though.. Nice flow and rhyming. Kept my attention all the way through.

Keep up the good work. =]

My friend, you will always be a loser,
If you don't intend to do better.

This is my favorite part! This would be a good reminder everytime I fail to achieve.. I thought it was about life until I read the last one.. Hehe.. I really suck in comprehension..

Excellent!

It awesome!, you really put your emotions on it. Anger and hate, I liked it..all of the lines possessed much power! Great write dude!

Keep on rocking!

Veamm

It seemed a little.. simple to me, I guess that's because I've been reading really complicated poems lately. >.> I did like it, though. It has a message that's so raw and blunt. I'm sure a lot of people can relate to this. The flow was a little rocky in some places, but you always got back on track. The ending is what really got me. It just tied everything together so perfectly.

There's no way out for a loser,

^^ I usually don't like the word "loser" in poems, but in this one, I think it really fits. I like it.

There's salt in your mouth,

^^ I'm not sure what this like is suppose to mean... is it literal or metaphorical?

It's time to solve you error,

^^ "you" should be "your", just a little mistake. :]

Great job.

Keep writing!
Cayce