Clouds of Golden Sin

by Lemma   Feb 25, 2008


Is sin evil?
Is it wrong?
To give in
When we're not strong?
Are we tainted?
Are we flawed?
To give in
To moral fraud?
Who can guide us?
Who can lead?
When we're desperate
To be freed?
For I feel liberated
From within
As I walk these clouds
Of golden sin.

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  • 13 years ago

    by Ray Smallshaw

    An enjoyable poem with good flow and meter short and to the point, a controversial topic which is not easily written about. Though I do believe most people may wallow in its rewards but like all sins there is usually a price to pay eventually if not in this world perhaps the next.
    To sin is easy trying not to is what makes those that do turn away from it heads and shoulders above those that fall we see those who take the easy option daily begging for their habits on the street, filling prisons, and headlining our newspapers, perhaps if we headlined the good people do there would be less of it. 5/5 an excellent poem that will have many pondering on its meanings. Ray S

  • 14 years ago

    by Kuro

    Although the lines were short, i really like your wording and the meaning was very easily relatable. nice job
    ~Kuro

  • 14 years ago

    by Cale

    Very well written!! I love what you did with this!! You used lots of emotion and it is SO powerful!! Great work! 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Spirit

    The insight of a sinner
    interesting. I personaly
    never had that feeling
    dut then again, none of
    my poems happen to
    have happened to me.
    So awesome job love the
    imagery. keep it up and
    thank you 4 the read

    @_@

  • 16 years ago

    by Lizaveta

    That's pretty short but very meaningful. The rhythm is energetic; the use of questions, use of "we" - it all makes a reader feel involved and wonder, what is there in the next line!

    and the metaphor "clouds of golden sin" is soooo powerful! It kinda contrasts sin and heaven. probably u mean that sometimes in life it's hard to differentiate good from bad.. well, your poem just made me think about it.

    5/5 great work))