Although the flow was definitely shaky in some spots ("She doesn't have enough energy to yell" could use some revision) I liked this poem. I felt it could have had a deeper meaning, so I could feel the pain the girl was experienceing a bit more, but I liked the use of quotes at the beginning and how you wrapped up the story. Nice job.

Dont get me wrong the poem was great but i believe that more information could have been added to the piece for feeling, i could feel it for the most part 4/5

Wow.
that was amazing.
i love this poem. it was truly great.
keep up the good work.

Nice poem... Keep up this good work :D

Nice poem, 5/5

Emotional ...
this is a emotional poetry... I like it :)

Very good poem.. the flow seemed a bit forced but besides that its a job well done. keep up the good work. i can really relate to this poem

Amazing, the imagery was fantastic and I loved the way you moved on bit by bit. This makes it easier for the reader to understand. The wording was great and the ending was fabulus. This is the best poem I read today, except the one I wrote (joke) (: Good job. 5/5

This poem has a great flow to it and is very emotional. i love the ending the most because it kind of adds that last pinch of darkness to the poem.

Wow...that was powerful!!!!!!!!!!!! this poem was filled of surprising thougths and all the words that had been described was really so true in real life! great portraying this thoughts.... that was absolutely dark poems and a bit scared me.. keep it up 5/5