Wow, this is an astonishing poem! The concept was brilliantly beautiful! And it was very well-written! 5/5 for sure.

This was a very sweet poem. But the flow was incredibly rocky, mainly because you made it rhyme in some parts, and not in other parts.
I also think the third stanza could be used without beginning with the word "Darling".
and on this line
"Just I beg, don't burn it, honey."

I think it sounds better as

"I just beg, please don't burn it honey."

Just my thoughts. I think you could add a little bit more to it, so it would give the ending a much bigger bang. ya know?

4/5

Very sweet, you write it in good way and its nice way to write it using the wind and sun, i like it

"When you need breeze, my Mr. Sunny
I'll blow any sorrow away" im sorry im not at good at comments as you are but ill try my best. the above quote from your poem is the only correction i found your poem might need and thats only putting "a" in " you need breeze" other then that i loved the flow and that display of emotion rivals another good poet i found on this website nice job-
5/5

Woa...i dont know what to say...but woa nice poem =]
5/5