I love the way you use personification to describe your angel of death.

Overall you kept up your rhyme theme, while making sure you had a good rhythm flow.

Good Job

Men

The flow was almost spot on :) It was a tad rocky in a few parts but that did not take away from the poem at all. Your choice of words was perfectly suited for this piece. I loved the ending. (laughing as the angel takes final breath or whatever it was). I'm not usually into this type of poetry but I really enjoyed reading this. Keep it up.

Alyssa. x

I like poetry like this. Even though it is about death, for some reason I think it would be better suited in "dark poems".
Just my opinion.
Anyways,
I liked the way it rhymed (meaning the words you chose to rhyme).
You got the story across very well.
By reading it, the title helped the story better.
It was not a poem that while reading it, you get confused until the end, about what the story is.
This told it through the entire thing.
About how your "angel of death" treated you, and seemed to torture you (by erasing your memories, numbing your body, etc)
The flow wasn't perfect, but it didn't matter to me.

"I thought I was alone, but thats not true,
Even while I'm dying, I still see you,"

That was my favorite part.
I do suggest, that at the end of each stanza, instead of having a comma, add a period.

Very creative!
5/5

Its on my favorite ^^

very very good job

Excellent poem... you write really nice...

So cold, I'm gasping for air,
Reaching out for a hand thats not there,
The illusion just laughs in my face,
Then it disappears without a trace,

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I think the last line would sound alot better with "Dissapearing without a trace".

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The rest of the poem was great. Good emotions, great flow. Kept my attention all the way through. Keep it up.

Wow, that was sooo powerful. I love this poem. It's on my favorites. You write amazingly. Keep up the great work!
<3

I really like this poem it is really strong.

I only have one suggestion

you should change
You're the one who as fallen so far,
to
You'er the one who HAS fallen so far.

Again this was i poem that i truley enjoyed
thankyou 4 the read
(=_=)

Very strong poem, and you had a great rhyme scheme keep em comin

Wow man, i really like that. i like the attitude, its dark but not creepy weird dark. very nice stuff

Ur an awesome poet...u shud try to get ur poems published!

Wow this poem was excellent well done, loved your words the flow everything about it

Woow

This is an awsomw kickass poem i love it keep up the good work

Awesome wording , and the flow was virtually flawless . The punctiation is a little off though , I think you should pass that over . I love it , 5/5

Wow, this poem had me "gasping for air." Truly amazing text, you made everything totally clear with how you wrote this. Well done! 5/5