Comments : Under The Radar II

  • 16 years ago

    by fera86

    Wow, another great poem by you... I really impressed with those simple but meaningful words. Nicely written and smoothly flowed.

    It's like I'm the worst thing on earth, cynically they frowned

    That lines are most powerful one

    You could make it better, the ending could have been better...
    But I don't know...
    Overall, still 5.5

  • 16 years ago

    by Ical

    Well, it is different from Under The Radar you've done before. This is not about love, like the previous one, so those are not related huh???
    This is gramatically better than the previous one, but still I love your first UTR. It is flowed very well and very inspiring, I mean this is excellent but the previous one was brilliant!!! Nice writing!!!

  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    I could really feel the power and emotion here which made it an interesting read. I could tell you this came straight from the heart because it was so strong and meaningful. There were places where things didnt make sense and words didnt fit so try reading this one over and revise it a bit more. Well done

  • 16 years ago

    by StonedGooberz

    Your poem is...your rhyming is decent but its knocks down your flow bad other then that its got some good ideas -
    raindrops 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by sweet escape

    Great. love the meaning behind the words
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    I don't know if you are translating to English, but there are many grammar mistakes and forced rhyming in this piece. Maybe your message would be better conveyed in a free verse form.

  • 16 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This well written poem is very deep

  • 16 years ago

    by OLA OLUWASEUN

    My goodness it's wonderful. I'll appreciate it if you could comment on my poems too Thanks