These Words Mean Nothing

Wow, very powerful and true. u should show her this poem. best of luck 5/5
xoxo
~me~

Oh wow great poem. i so can relate to it. it had a great flow and word choice. it rhymed good. 5/5

"In my sleep I'm smiling
Smiling 'til the end
But reality kills this smile
When that smiles just pretend"

^perfectly worded stanza!! i know this feeling and can relate. soemtimes you just want to escape to your dreams where anything is possible but in the end when you wake up you know its all a lie.

"These happy words mean nothing
In the end they turn to pain
Little showers may stop the drought
But you'll die drowning in the rain"

^um..wow! great imagery. sometimes crying does make u feel better though!! it helps to release some of the pain ur feeling.

overall great job!!! 5/5

I'm going to play dissect-a-poem today:

I'd tell you how I feel
If I thought you'd care
If I thought it could change things
I'd have told you then and there

^ i completely understand, mr tomato.....how much change i wish this world could provide..then i'd dry my eyes...

Cause then and there I realized
Why this smile feels so strange
In reality things like this
Things like this don't change

^ treasure that smile....

In my sleep I'm smiling
Smiling 'til the end
But reality kills this smile
When that smiles just pretend

^ reality sux. make your own. eventually, it falls apart, but it lasts a while..just like a dream...

These happy words mean nothing
In the end they turn to pain
Little showers may stop the drought
But you'll die drowning in the rain

^ the last two lines of this are just so amazing...it's a great metaphor..the best i've seen in a long time.

All these words mean nothing
Except the way this ends
All my poems end this way
Cause in the end we're still just friends

^ justfriends is a new disease....

in short, horrible poem. i wish you would stop writing them.

naw! jk....loved it!