Oh i love this poem so much, it gets me very emotionally. reminds me of me and my love. im glad you feel this way, its just a natural high. fantastic write! keep up the good work!

It was really good!..really sweet!.....good job!

This poem was well written i like how you used questions to start of each stanza which is very effective and kept me reading
the use of bigger words such as "endeavor" makes the poem more unique and interesting as you get sick of reading the same words over and over
the flow was good and the emotion is there because as i was reading i could tell that you really feel something for thsi girl
great job 5/5

This has a lot of emotion. i love the way it is set up like a sonet....and i love how so many people can relate to this poem.

5/5

The emotions and ideals, though unlikely to be true, are beautifully expressed throughout the poem and kept me interested from start to finish. My only critique is that the flow was really broken and stagnant throughout the entire piece leaving it hard to connect the words from line to line. I thought you did very well creating the images, though slightly generic, throughout the piece and you relayed them pretty well. I'm not sure if you were trying to follow a certain structure in the piece involving syllables in the lines and if you were you either have to stick to it or not attempt it because a broken structure is an unappealing structure. If it was a free form than it is completely fine and just had flow issues due to the sonics of the chosen words. Overall, this was a pretty good poem.

4/5

I'm not really feeling this as a love poem, I am so sorry I just am really tough on these kinds of poems. You have a person's name on the bottom, this poem must be for them, and I can tell you put a lot of your own emotions into this piece, and a lot of your thoughts, and I see the plot or theme of this poem as questions we ask when we are in love. I love a couple of your stand out descriptions: plateau and endeavor. I can tell that you did put your heart into this piece and as a gift to somebody you love, it would mean a lot. Heck I got a silly little thing once from a boy but it made me laugh (in a good way!) and I could tell he put a lot of thought into it.

Now for the poem itself, sorry please don't hate me!, I think the flow was broken here and there as if one line had an extra word and then cut off the next line by another. While I like the contrast of these two lines, "Cry with me when everything is bad" and, "Try your best, to never let me feel sad" I thought that it was, you know, kind of forced into the rhyme scheme as though you wanted those two words badly into it, or maybe as a positive it was really what you were feeling and you wanted them both in it that way.

Remember, don't poke an eye with too many I's. Once you establish that this is a first person poem, you really do not need to put more than one I and then could also be said for the me's too. It's not a me me me and a you you you poem, it's a poem for expression so maybe try going into more detail and depth of your descriptions. You don't need fancy words to list a poem from the ground, you need Passion and you can spice it up that way with stronger words that would describe exactly your emotion of how you are feeling at the second you are writing it, or with your one true love.

Hey there, nicely written poem, and i like the flow and rhyme sequence that you used. the only thing i could think of critiquing would be the emotions and how in depth the poem was. if you lengthened the poem and were to go more in depth of the feeling it would have a lot stronger sense of the feelings you feel, and transport the reader to the depths of your heart. also some more poetic devices could have been used, metaphors, similes, alliteration etc.

hope i have been helpful,
Ben

I really enjoyed this poem. I liked the use of a larger vocabulary, such as plateau and endeavor. It really made the poem interesting. I also liked how you started each stanza with "Will you", it gave a nice sense of repeition.
However, I thought the poem ended a bit too abruptly. I feel like another stanza would have added a ton to this poem.
All in all, I think this is a great poem. 4/5. =]

Will you promise, to love me forever?,
Unconditionally, as long as we're together,
Never allowing our love to be an endeavor,
Our hearts beating, with the weight of a feather...

^^ I really liked this stanza, It was a great end to your poem, it was powerful.

Your poem was a great read.
I like reading poems that ask questions =]
There was a great flow and you had a wonderful word choice. A find that a lot of poems use this rhyme scheme but it did suit your poem very well.

I really liked this poem. The flow was off in the first stanza. Maybe change the wording to make it better. Other then that the flow was good for the rest of the poem. I loved the questions that you asked. 5/5

I really like your range of imagination, great work! Your feelings are deep and expressive i love it! 5/5

This poem is....wow! It's beautiful!
I loved this part:

"Even out in Rome, on the highest plateau,
Or taking a cruise, on the deep blue sea,"

This is so wonderful and it gives the reader a lot of visualness. Great write! Have a Happy Easter!

Amazing:)
Questioning form really works

And there are such minor details that make the poem really unique and, having found one, you start seeking for them in the poem - that's what makes your "Will you?" intriguing.

i mean like in the 1st stanza "the highest plateau" plus "the deep sea" show how emmm global your love is,
and the "angels" idea also is great.

overall, what amazed me the most was the fact that though in the poem you ask your beloved to give you everything, to love you, though you never say that "i love you and i'll everything for you", it's so obvoius in this poem because it is written with such a great emotion and your love though you don't mention it is behind every line. And this is really special and talented, to express your love without saying banal words.
5/5

ps. i just think you can remove those "," after "?" in the first lines of every stanza. it would be better i believe if you ask a short question and then kinda explain. i would make the intonation perfect.
:)