Very good poem. It shows a different kind of love than normal poems do. Which is very interesting and makes the read better. Also, the flow and word usage were excellent... 5/5

I like this a lot and I love a chick who isn't scared to admit that she loves sucking

Love this....wishing someone could do that to me

You write with a pen so flawless

I liked this poem but I think with a diffecnt vocabulary this would stand out alot more an enjoyable read but just a thought Plot121

Lovely. It was a lovely poem.

His MUSCLES bunching under her soft finger tips. && They lay in each other�s ( WHY DOES IT LOOK LIKE THAT) arms as sleep takes them

but hey it is still a great poem... one question why does it always start off with her giving him a blow job???

He runs his hands gently down her body.
Kisses her lips soft seductively sweet.
Undressing each other slowly teasingly.
Holding on to each other firmly lovingly.

** Right from the start, I like how you jumped right in to the action. Many people (including myself) try to set up some sort of story line, but given the short / medium length of the poem, your style is very appropriate.

She runs her hands up his back.
His mussels bunching under her soft finger tips.
All he can think of is her beautiful curved body.
His heart pumping fast sounding like a drum in his ear.

** HIS MUSSELS should be HIS MUSCLES. In the last line, I would add a comma between FAST and SOUNDING. This helps set a small break in the line when you read it.

He rubs his fingers over her nipples.
Gently he sucks on them making them become hard.
He holds them cresting them softly.
Make sparks of heat light all over her body.

** Again, I would add another comma between THEM / MAKING and THEM / CRESTING; it seems to flow a little better. I am not sure, but I think CRESTING should be CARESSING. CRESTING is not the best word to use here. MAKE should be MAKING; and I would change LIGHT to something else; maybe SURFACE or TINGLE.

** The third stanza is a nice little break. The lines are not too long and the wording is great. This stanza is a little bland as far as using descriptive words, but that is good. It kind of seemed like a short intermission when I read it. I would suggest changing the last like though; it is a little broken. I would try HIS TREMBLING LEGS PROVES HE LIKES THE MOTION, or something similar.

** Nothing to mention in the next stanza, well written.

She is on her knees now.
Taking her time enjoying every moment.
Licking and sucking his dic
until he is close to cumin.

** I suggest another comma or maybe a semi-colon between TIME and ENJOYING. It helps to separate the two separate thoughts. I am not fond of the word CUMIN in the last line. First off it should be COMING or CUMING; but it is not the best word to use here. Up to this point, the poem is very clean, passionate and has some dignity. It makes me think of a couple really making love and not just screwing. My personal opinion is that words like that kind of "dirty" the flow, or makes it less beautiful.

He takes her in his arms.
Lays her gently on the bed.
Slowly he enters unable to wait any longer.
They move together slowly at first.
The pace quickens as the moans become more frequent.
They take each other lovingly and blindly.
Over the peeks they sore.
They lay in each other's arms as sleep takes them
just as the sun peaks over the horizon.

** ENTERS / UNABLE could use another famous comma. I love the last line; its a great closing point. I like it so much, in fact, I may have titled the poem OVER THE HORIZON.

** Overall, I great piece. Not too long; not to short. At first I was not sure of the flow. Using words like SLOWLY TEASINGLY / FIRMLY LOVINGLY did not sound right. After reading it a few times over though, I really enjoyed it. It seemed to portray a "this is it" attitude which was appropriate for the poem. Many people don't care what happens during this type of activity, so the attitude rely complimented it. Only other thing I would mention is to separate the last two lines from the previous stanza. Because it is a new thought, it should have its own stanza.

Great job!