I miss u

by MELISSA   Mar 23, 2008


I miss u.
I miss ur voice.
The way the things u said just made me feel whole.
I miss ur arms.
Which made me feel so secure.
I miss ur lips
Which kisses brought me to the sky and back down.
and i miss u cause i was ur gurl and u were ma man and u were my everything and now dat ur gone and all i can do is think about how much i miss u and dat im lost with out u.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Lemon Square Bear23

    I liked this one also i liked how u went into detail about what u missed nice job keep it up! 5/5 always
    Kate~

  • 16 years ago

    by MissMeg

    O i love this, great job girl, keep itup.
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Colby

    Hmm well, welcome to the club.

    A few things. I know poetry can be fantastic no matter how it is. And i dont feel that one can be bad at it because its how you feel and how you feel is never wrong.

    A few tips ( remember i am not saying your work is bad i liked it )

    - Try rhyming
    - Maybe putting them into stanzas ( easier to read )
    - Make your work more orginal ( more you )

    Just a few..... thought that might help just perfect your work even more

    Ttyl

    Colby

  • 16 years ago

    by Gabriel Antonio White

    Damn... that happened 2 me 1 time so i no how u feel. shes all i ever think about nymore. but it'll be ok. it's a very nice poem and i hope to see some poems on the positive side soon. lol. ;)

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