Super great imagery.

But... a few corrections:

*not sure if swiveling is the word you were looking for in line 2. maybe spiraling.

*baron... is like a duke. what you mean is barren.

Other than that, I love it!

Yeah, i liked it. good imagery, well done

Again with the no rhyming....but hey this is an *watches language* awsome piece . i love the idea behind this piece alot def. one of my favorites.

the way you turn the rose petals and compare that to a life is *language* beautiful way of writing poetry.

- raindrops 5/5

I have no idea why, but as I read this poem I felt like sadness fell over my like a blanket...
The imagery was excellent, and I loved the read.
Very well written.
5/5
- Paula.

LOL i LOVED THIS POEM, thinking of how leaves on the ground and refering it to people the idea excels my mind lol.

5/5. Now this is more like it. The metaphors are well chosen and applied. This was a very enjoyable read.

Wow this poem is fabulous. You have used such beautiful imagery! The choice of words fit the piece beautifully. There was a magnificent flow. Besides the word corrections that were stated above there is no need for change. Superb piece!

A beautiful piece. Cardinal petals fading atrous, referring to hampering ones inspiration is outstanding. 5/5

This poem is nice, but it seems you repeated yourself in way. For example, in the first stanza
and second stanza you write:

Rose petals drift to the floor.
Wilting and swiveling through time,
like so many dreams now given up.
Turning black and gloomy.

Rose petals now brittle and crumbling,
Upon the baron marble floors,
crushed under our feet,
like so many of our hopes.

So they are slowly dying, I can understand that, the poem makes sense so far.. but the next two stanza's you write:

Fresh rose petals drift to the floor
red and soft with youth.
Staining our feet blood red
as we slowly kill someones inspiration.

Poor Crushed petals
sadly forgotten by time.
Left behind forever.
Lost and lonely; dead.

This left me a bit confused, as the first two stanza's expressed the deteriorating of rose petals, then in the third stanza they are fresh rose petals all over again? It didn't quite make sense to me, overall it was a nice poem though.

Was vary good. It something everyone can take there own way and can c the meaning.