This is deep...really interesting.very emotional..5/5

I thought it was great. The consistency of the rhymes was flawless and the title was intriguing. You used the commas nicely, compared to the people that seem to scatter them all over the place, not knowing their purpose. In the end, great poem, bravo, and a five from me.

EOB
I really enjoyed reading thia piece you have penned. Very deep and intense thoughts.

What else am I left with, but knowledge,
and memories ridden with pain?
The streetlights, a shadow, a number,
what else, in the bitter rain?

This stanza holds so much sadness within. Love the metaphors you have used here.

The concrete and I have in common
a grayness we cannot destroy.
To think we would ever be colored;
vain dreams of a blinded boy.

This stanza is awesome. I love the way you have compared the concrete with the absense of color in your world. You did an excellent job ob this one.
~Bravo~
Take care Cindy

Very nice! I can understand everything being said.

The best yet

AMAZING.

Very thoughtful indeed. Short and meaningful... very well done!

Congrats on the spotlight! Love the poem! beautiful and hauntingly sad! Amazing flow and message!

I LOVED IT

Amazing write...

"The concrete and I have in common
a grayness we cannot destroy.
To think we would ever be colored;
vain dreams of a blinded boy."

so heartfelt...
loved it...

"The concrete and I have in common
a grayness we cannot destroy.
To think we would ever be colored;
vain dreams of a blinded boy."

Only a true poet can do this: capture life in something others may not care to give a second glance.

A very well deserved win and a wonderful write.

good luck and peace
shobhana

Great poem
no wonder it won

Unfortunately our fears are often realized,you create a mood in your writes almost like a melancholy acceptance of sadness. you lead the reader through a sad story with your imagery.Your rhymes are perfect.

A simlpy beautiful and emotional poem. one of the best i've read in awhile. thank you for sharing. job well done. 5/5.

-Ashlei.

Your ability to take something so common, such as concrete, and create something so vivid and brilliant is astonishing!
Beautifully written as always!