Unpretty

First go back and edit your contracted words to put the appostrophy in and remove the "junk" the site puts in when we "copy/paste".
Now reread your write and see if it has a nice metre/rhythm throuhgout. Perhaps rewording will get there as some lines seem wordy.
Check stanza six for logic and grammar, first line doesn't make sense.
Write with emotion but don't let emotion write.

As I stand in my bedroom
Applying all the make up in my draws
Concealer, foundation, mascara
Try to cover all my flaws
^ This is a sad start to this poem.

I manage to get through the day
Make ups worn off by after school
I feel so ugly and so horrible
I'm looking like a fool
^The sadness continues. It sounds as if you are bullying yourself.

Girls at school they tease me
Over what they see
While I'm preying to god
Why does it have to be me
^School can be be the cruelest time of anyones life.

They talk about me behind my back
While my self esteem is broken
I just run to the toilets
With more nasty things spoken
^More bullying, I can visulise your tears.

But its not like they would understand
What its like being me
I bet they don't wake up, look in the mirror
And hate what they see
^Any reader of this would wnat to reassure you that you are indeed beautiful. I suggest that these girls are in fact teasing you about your insecurities, not your looks.

They don't have no self esteem
Don't need make up from their drawers
Theres no need for them
To cover up their lack of flaws
^ Thers is no amount of make up that can cover up the nastiness of these girls. There flaws are clear for all to see.

They wont ever be ugly
But I'm stuck with it like a curse
Its like disease
Just whatevers worse
^ These girls are ugly, they will regret their actions in years to come.

All I ever ask is to be pretty
So why can't my dreams come true
Its all I ever wanted
Please make my wish come true
^ Find happiness inside first. Love the person you are and then you will love who you are. No body is perfect and looks are not every thing. Beauty is in many things, in an action, in a smile, a gesture, in a personality. Find your beauty and be proud of who you are.

Well done, It takes alot to spill your inner most fears onto a world stage like this. Stand tall and you will see, you can reach those stars.

Michael