Very good write. The first stanza really stood out to, really caught my attention. Also, I loved the emotion throughout the attire. Overall, perfectly and beautifully written
5/5

Eyes filled with tears, scanned the grayish sky.
Whispered your name, along with a great sigh.
Heavenly castle, in the air mislead me.
I am lost. Lost in my [own] fantasy.
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Wonderful opening stanza.
Whispered your name, along with a great sigh.
^^^ This line is so true how we tend to whisper the name and sigh at the thought of what went wrong.

A love that has turned to pain [I cried.]
You made me feel everything. So Much.
I Love You. -For all that you are and aren't.
But why, why did you choose to let go?
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This stanza is so very sad. We give our all and love through the good and bad, love them unconditionally and see past the flaws (of our partner) and we are left holding our hearts in the palm of our hand wondering (why) did they give up on us so easily.

Now that you're gone. Alone naked I am.
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Very striking line! How we feel so alone that we feel naked. Our hearts stripped and left to die and excruciatingly painful death (of the heart)

Spent memories, trying desperately.
It's all in my head, can be erased, [I know].
The way I feel, think and act Today,
Will I endure it forever? Maybe [Not].
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I love this ending. As though you are having a conversation in your mind .... Excellent!

A very sad yet beautifully woven piece of heartache ....
Luanne

That's awesome. :) Great job. 5/5!

Haha... The brackets truly added something extra to it. Beautifully written if I do say so myself. Very sad.. and touching too.
You also had great imagery involved, it worked out wonderfully.
5/5

Haappy writing,
Hannah-

Damn, u got it all work up on this and making me going in da dreams of how u written was brilliantly beautiful, you're pretty at this and I gotta check them out more of your poems... this is super creative I eva read!

"Spent memories, trying desperately.
It's all in my head, can be erased, [I know].
The way I feel, think and act Today,
Will I endure it forever? Maybe [Not]. "

so hearfelt and sad.... beautifully written... i like the way you have added brackets...
great work..

That is really good. It looks like you used your heart rather than your mind, which is a good quality.

Such a tearful poem. full of passions and emotions

well done "i hope everything is fine"

I never thought i would be able to express the true feelings of pain...and yet here you are with this awsome poem...that not only explained everything but it conveyed every emotion...into something more than real..its so full of passion and sadness...this poem wasw written from your heart..you can tell u really put alot of time and emotionl..and effort into it.

Wow this was beautiful and very deep writing. the first stanza reallly held the most meaning. a great way to start off a poem. i love yer writing style it's unique. you did a wonderful job with this one. keep up the nice work! 5/5.

-Ashlei.

Wow its like a classic figure.. so alive.. and so meaningfull.. ur so great about being a writtet!! 5/5

Wow its like a classic figure.. so alive.. and so meaningfull.. ur so great about being a writtet!! 5/5

Wow its like a classic figure.. so alive.. and so meaningfull.. ur so great about being a writtet!! 5/5

Wonderfully written. The flow, emotion and image was all there. I could imagine someone reading it, like classical poetry even, with choppy words and a crowd erupting with satisfied clapping. Well done. There's nothing I could say about making this better. 5/5 No critic. Absolutely beautiful.