Well even it is small , , but i really love tit , i can feel your depression , !!

i use to feel same way , good words and expression

It feels as though you have written thoughts with no connections, each lil stanza seems to be a single thought but there is no line that draws the first to the second and so on. The sound at the end of the obsession and depression especially stands out, as it does not reflect the ending sounds of the other words: skies, eyes have a harsh sound, as well as night, light and free, me, but the sion sound of other two words have this softer longer out feeling that truley does not flow with the rest, as though it was just put in there to center the whole poem around the theme of sadness.

I really liked the simplicity of this poem
It wasn;t overwhelming and it's something
anyone can read and understand who are just
getting started.
I thought it started off pretty well.
It got me into right away and I wasn't bored
Intros and endings are most important for me
so nice job
5/5

Short yet endlessly powerful. I think that you expressed your emotions from the beginning to the end of this poem excellently. Whole piece posses effective and captivating simplicity. This reminds me on some of my older poems and I've been through the emotions that you described here which makes this write even more powerful for me.

Actually this is my favorite type of poem. Each of the couplets give volumes of how a depressed person feel and the poem flows absolutely perfect

"Joy filled rooms and sun filled skies
bring no happiness to my eyes.

The sun filled skies whether metaphoric or not prepares us for the contrast of joy and sorrow

"Darkened caves, black as night,
keep me from seeing light."
The contrast continues with night and light

"Drowning in depression,
Overridden with obsession."

Drowning and overridden contrast yet blend

"How to let everything go and be free
is a question that hangs over me. "

The search for the solution is a great conclusion of a deep poem

This poem is short and full with contrasts. The rhymes in each stanza were good. The metaphores you passed through the poem were also good. Although that, the short lines kept the poem plain and without much contant. I liked this poem so I'll still give it a 5/5

Now this is a poem I loveee!!! It's so short and innocent yet so deviousss!! I love it! The way you've used to words and mixed them around a little bit its amazing =] My favorite part of this poem would be "Drowning in depression,
Overridden with obsession." Am-az-ing! xxxxx

Short, but still to the point. Depression is a tricky thing.

"Joy filled rooms and sun filled skies
bring no happiness to my eyes."
[^^I liked the opening. It makes it to where you can automatically tell the poem is about depression, which does not leave someone in a stat of confusion.]

"Darkened caves, black as night,
keep me from seeing light."
[^^Not quite as powerful as the first lines. Even though the syllables are the same in both lines, it still reads rocky. I think it is the second line that needs new wording. Maybe something like "Disable me from seeing the light". A better flow makes the poem seem less like the rhymes are forced.]

"Drowning in depression,
Overridden with obsession."
[^^I think these two lines need to be switched, and the maybe add something to it, since the lines are shorter than the others in the poem. Maybe something like:
"Overridden with obsession,
Drowning in my own depression"
Just a suggestion<HAHA THAT RHYMED TOO!]

"How to let everything go and be free
is a question that hangs over me."
[^^Again, it is a little rocky. It is also a question, so there needs to be a question mark. And technically it is two questions.
My suggestion for this would be something like:
"How do I let go? How do I get free?
Those are the questions that hang over me."]

Those are my thoughts on the poem. It is entirely up to you if you want to use them. Everyone will read this differently. I also suggest taking out the question marks in the title, or taking one of them out. In correct English you use only one question mark for a question.
Iwas honest, and gave it a 4/5.

~Lace

Short, but said alot, the ending summed it up good

This is very good.
I can tell that you're a true poet.
You don't have to think about, you write from the heart.
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Very eloquent

This poem is so goddamn good that i don't even know where to start...minimal yet stronger than most poems i've read with 15 stanzas and 100, 10cent words that are meaninless, not one word in your poem is wasted, and i can relate to every one, so maybe i am biased, so...whatever, i simply loved this, and it's going in my favorites, you managed to knock me on my ass, and you get a bug ol' HELL YEAH! from me..
john