This is beautiful!!!!!!!!! This is how I feel about another boy at my school!

Aw i think you should give it to him=]

Very power and very strong. I could feel the deep passions you described because Ive felt them before. You described the desire to have some so flawlessly and I could clearly understand the meaning throughout the piece. Well done *5/5*

I can feel the emotion behind the words "I want to be the girl that lies so softly in your arms,
The one that strokes your silky hair as we lye in stillness,
You could hold me in your arms so close, so everything is fine,
I want to be the girl that you bring soup to when I have an illness."

i love the way you project an image into the readers mind and can keep their attention easily.

great job. 5/5

I could feel the emotion of this piece. You know the title portrayed thoughts into my mind which I didn't want to think about. It had me wondering about certain things.

I found the ache of this poem to really touch my heart, though again I didn't like the word "lame" within it. It just didn't go together for me. This was a powerful piece which I did enjoy reading as it expressed so much dearly.

Overall I enjoyed it. ~Mel