Comments : Stay Away

  • 11 years ago

    by azurelady

    A little detrimental, dark, and disappointing for your norm. Especially given how easily you are detoured. Take a little more pride in your self, and put yourself out there a little more without crossing that invisable line. Eventually you will learn where it is. ~Anita

  • 11 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    I completely agree with the message in the poem, I think we all need that special someone in our lives or else we don't feel whole. There is no shame in wanting or needing to be with the one you love, especially when your a better person around them. I thought the rhymes were a bit simple and the flow was off in a few places, also a couple spelling errors. I have it a 4/5 Good job GG23

  • 9 years ago

    by Timothy

    I know I wasnt very nice to you a long time ago, but wish you would come back. This poem was pretty good, but I know you can do better.

  • 6 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    A great rhyme scheme revealing much of yourself with a strong finish

    5>>>>>>>>

  • 6 years ago

    by xXx Eternal PainxXx

    Yet in all my witty remarks about myself I must confess,
    that with out your understanding of me I am some how less.
    This is not a pitch to make you want to know who I can be,
    it is just a short explination of me.
    ^^^ that's my favorite part and i seem to love the way it flows and how some parts rhyme and the way it makes the reader feel something deep inside them even if they don't feel anything to begin with! :) good write! 5/5

    Queen Ashlin

    • 6 years ago

      by Robert

      Thank you for those words. Please check out my blog.
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