A little detrimental, dark, and disappointing for your norm. Especially given how easily you are detoured. Take a little more pride in your self, and put yourself out there a little more without crossing that invisable line. Eventually you will learn where it is. ~Anita
I completely agree with the message in the poem, I think we all need that special someone in our lives or else we don't feel whole. There is no shame in wanting or needing to be with the one you love, especially when your a better person around them. I thought the rhymes were a bit simple and the flow was off in a few places, also a couple spelling errors. I have it a 4/5 Good job GG23
A great rhyme scheme revealing much of yourself with a strong finish
6 years ago
by xXx Eternal PainxXx
Yet in all my witty remarks about myself I must confess,
that with out your understanding of me I am some how less.
This is not a pitch to make you want to know who I can be,
it is just a short explination of me.
^^^ that's my favorite part and i seem to love the way it flows and how some parts rhyme and the way it makes the reader feel something deep inside them even if they don't feel anything to begin with! :) good write! 5/5