Nice job, keep it up

Oh hun, T_T I love this poem. Tis sad sad sad, But has a good meaning behind it. Trust me, No need to feel this way hunny! 5/5 for this poem. In fact I have the same poem for the club we are in. Can you go looky hunn.

This is good:)
i nominated it for the contest :)

"Once again here I am all
alone. Not once do I get a call
from the sun, instead it's the rain
that only offers me pain."

I like the start of your first stanza its powerful, and I like your rhyme scheme of ABAB. its very simple but it fits this poem.

"Silently alone at night while I
lay in bed and pray to the sky
to let the sun come out and
shine on me. please rain I demand
you to go away and give me one
day of happiness with the sun."

This is my favorite stanza, its very good imagery which I enjoyed very much. I like the fact that your using imagery so you can make your readers picture exactly what you are writing. its perfect.

"But you are to selfish and reject
my wish. Instead you wish to disconnect
me from happiness all together.
Please rain, go away I don't like your weather."

I love your contrast in this stanza, I love it when poets use contrast in their poetry, it gives each poem more depth, good job. And I liked the fact that this stanza is so openly honest.

"But I have one question I wish to ask the rain,"

I love this line, this has to be my favorite line in the poem.

"Why, Why, Why? I see noone
knows the answer so I will sing this tune,

"Why does it rain hardest on those
who deserve the sun?
Why?
Why?
Why?"

I love your repetition, of the word "Why" this gives the poem MORE depth than it already had. Very good job with this one. Keep up the good work, I enjoyed reading this. You should check out some of my poetry sometime. Good work!

Aww this is really good, well done xxx

Aw sad poem. But I like the title, because I agree with it in principle. Very well written and I like how you rhymed and just kept going with the lines. Very nicely done.
5/5