My Teary Eyed Demise

Aww thats great well done xx

"Letting go of forever"

First of all the first line in your poem is very powerful I like it. its good.

"I look in your direction
Hoping to catch your stare"

I like this, its so innocent and it flows very well with the poem.

"Just be mine once more
For my heart is yours to take
I'm tired of the tears
I'm tired of the ache"

This stanza is really good, so honest so pure. Sounds like a child begging for something they want, yet its complex in a matter.

"I love you all too much
It rips me in two
Do you not feel what I feel?
Please tell me it isn't true"

I like the flow of this stanza its simple but gets the job done right.

"With my hands in my pockets
My eyes narrowed to the ground
I await your beautiful voice
Yet I hear not even a sound"

Perfect imagery in this stanza very very nice. Good I like this stanza very much. I can really picture this in my mind.

"If you happened to be wondering
Your love was my greatest prize
But without it I can't help but feel
All so near to my teary eyed demise "

Perfect ending, it sounded sweet yet it still maintained what you were trying to say in this poem. It was very well written, I enjoyed reading this. I'll read more of your stuff. You should check out some of my poetry. ;)