Awz. this poem was really heart-felt. it's not right for someone to have to think they have to be perfect. to think that they have to be what everyone wants them to be. i'll stop with the `wisdom words` for now. i'm probably confusing you.
on a more clear note, this poem was beautiful to read. i hope you always have a passion for writting! =)
Watch out, I break a little too easily
Because I am a little porcelain doll
`Repeat of "little" bothered me dearly.
I loved your opening stanza. It was so ... beautiful. And it made me think when people hate you, it's normally because they envy you and they're just waiting for you to slip and fall.
Second stanza is haunting. It makes me realize how painted society is. How you have to look a certain way--and it made me think you're trying to get rid of the superficialness. It's so old, but no one wants to look "normal" hence the dust. People control you--what they think affects the way you live your life.
Omg, I totally didn't expect that. That's stunning! I'm taking it that the doll is watching you. Looking at yourself through the doll ... WOW. What a great idea! Though I didn't quite fancy your third or fourth stanza, you wrapped it up really nicely.
These are poems i allways have immagined reading.. it tells of people in real life. whether its the writer or a friend.. so much emotion.. i like the last part when the mother finds the razer and can feel her pain by the porcelain doll breaking and that the doll used to be her and now the daughter is nothing like it .. so its no longer a twin its just a doll and so that form of the girl goes away .. as does the doll
I really love the way you write. It's very powerful and as a cutter I can really relate to what your saying. For someone who doesn't cut you did an amazing job with displaying the emotions of a cutter. Very nice work. Shanik