Comments : Poem one

  • 14 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Excellent piece and such heartfelt emotions of how you are invisible to your lover, yet you long for him to be with you. Here are some titles you might want to use instead of the current one: "Longing For Your Love", "Invisible To You", "Secretly Dreaming". Just some ideas. Well-expressed emotions and feelings, take care and keep writing, always and forever...

    ~MaryAnne

  • 14 years ago

    by YourThe ReasonIDiedTonight

    This was very beautiful, i can see that this came from your heart

    keep up the great work

    5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Em

    So many emotions running through this poem. Well written, with powerful stanzas. 5/5, Em