Wowee.wow.wow.
lol.
well i absolutely AdOrE this particular poem because it is nothing but great. Its so truthful and i love it.

5/5.

much love,
mac.<3
[.just.another.silly.teenage.girl.]

Holy wow....
i love it <33333

I like it,sometimes i got this thoughts and i thought its not a poem to write,but its what i feel and everything can be done,well done 5/5

I could understand what you want to express through this poem... wonderfully described... What i felt is - your poem is a collection of well arranged random thoughts...although I prefer stanzas bt still i like your poem...

good work.. keep writin...

This is a very well thought out poem about life's surprises It makes me think deeply about trust that somehow what does not kill me only makes me stronger

great work
5>>>>>>>>>>>>>

Really reads more like prose to me, I could not find the rythm after multiple reads. good story to be told though. As always just an opinion...comment no vote here.

Although i usualy prefer poems with stanzas, yours was really good without. there wasnt really a flow but i think it worked really well anyway. overall - a very good poem 5/5

suicidal love xx

I liked this poem. It feels like someone's just talking about something, and it's just whatever thoughts they have. Makes an interesting flow.

Only thing, is on about 3 of the lines there wasn't enough space, so went to another line. When it does that, it breaks up the flow of the poem. For those parts you might want to try doing something different, different way of saying it, or way to keep thought together.

Good poem

The rhythm's off.

That's easily fixed, though.

You can keep the syllables close to one another.

For example:
The next you're in pain
Kinda funny though

Those are same syllables.
But the next line

The way everything can turn out as perfect as you can get it

That just ruined it.

I pictured..
Someone talking slowly
Then, quickly (can't understand the words quickly)

You can put in punctuation.
It helps.
You let the readers know where
to speed up, slow down on the poem.

In my opinion. You need to fix your format.

It's not bad. It's just hard to read.

I loved the ending because it was packed with power. Great message behind you words. Well done/