Thats very good well done xxxxxx

This poem reminds me of myself&&What i would say to the person I love...I loved how you used a Rhyme Technique...Beautiful Job 5/5

Good word choice and emotions in this poem, I enjoyed it a lot.

"Because I don't wanna wake up oneday && you're far away gone."

There should be a space between "oneday", and the second part of that line doesn't make much sense to me. Maybe reword it to this:

"Because I don't wanna wake up one day and find you're far gone."

Also, I noticed in your poem for "and" you wrote &&, and in my opinion its easier to read if you just wrote "and", plus its proper grammer.

But otherwise than that, I liked this, very heartfelt. Keep writing, always and forever....

Let me tell you I love you once more;
Because in my heart that's one thing for sure.
&& if you still can't perceive how much sorry I really am in this melody,
I 'd make another one just so you would finally forgive me.

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Shoottt sorry. messed up... hahah <33 love it tho

Good poetry, Good to see younger people like us producing deeper and more interesting poetry day by day, sadly I can't keep fequently posting.

"trying to clear the shits out of my head" good to see abit of rage haha.

Dean.xx

This would make me want to forgive you ..

nicely written in a contemporary style