This is a very deep and emotional piece. I absoutly love it. Keep up the good work. I can relate to this in some ways.

I thought that the flow was good and that you explained it deeply. I have to say that I found nothing wrong with this poem.

I am in love with it.
I am feeling those exact thoughts right now, and its good to know that someone somewhere knows what is like when everythings not ...right.
You're a really good writer...
Message me if you want.

Peace.

I have to say you pen your thoughts something similar to the way i do my own, you write what you feel turn it into a poem, and don't care if people judge you for it.

i know this feeling a alittle to well and a little to often, so i can relate on this level, you never never ever give in to it. because depression is a very hard hole to fall into and a very hard one to crawl out of.

if i love you then you will know
if you love me then let me go
- this is proof that their is people that love you and don't want to see you like this and subconsciously you will know that. i used to think liek that if you love me, then you will see its hurting me then let me go, and they didn't and i'm still here today :] something which i am forever thankful for.

your rhyming is basic and so is the lanuage but for a poem of this subject it works very well, and you don't have to make it complex, because if you try to then you have to think about it too much, and then you can end up messing the poem up because your written thoughts are all over the place and then they make no sense anymore.

a little bit of punctuation at the end of the stanzas can gp along way though and they can make the poem look more professional.

I really like this well done

I don't know what to say but only that I feel the same. Sad but true.

xXx

I loved every single word of this poem! yer a great writer, never quit! =]

I'm sorry that I'm leaving you
but what else can i do?
if i love you then you will know
if you love me then let me go

i love this verse and i can so relate
but this poem is so powerful

deffentley 6/5 for me

Very amazing. i love the way you wrote this, very strong feelings.
but, i have to say, i agree with robbie... the fact that they love you means they won't let you go.
trust me, i've been dealing with this very recently..
and here's something to think on if you really are contimplating suicide: Suicide is a long term answer to a short term problem..
anyhow. great poem. amazing talent. thumbs up!

Nice poem. And nicely written too! I think that you done a wicked job on expressing the emotins you feel, and the flow was sensational.

Its how i feel everyday but a smile on my face says other wise..

keep on writing

Wow, I can totally relate.
"everything i touch gets taken away"
Ughhhh.

WOW THIS ONE IS SOOO STRONG ON ME...
I REALLY LIKE THIS ONE OUT OF ALL MINES..
SOO DOES THIS POEM HAVE A BIG AFFECT
ON YOU OR ANYTHING?
BECAUSE IT'S REALLY DEEP AND TOUCHING.
YOU ARE WAY MUCH BETTER THAN I AM...
MAKES ME JEALOUS AND WANNA START MY
WRITING AGAIN BUT I GUESS I'M GETTING
TO LAZY AT THAT BECAUSE I HAVE NO TIME.
BUT YOU KNOW YOU SHOULD KEEP IT UP...
I REALLY APPRICIATED ALL THE SUPPORT
AND COMMENTS THAT YOU HAVE GIVEN ME..
AND NOW IT'S MY TURN TO REPAY THEM
ALL BACK TO YOU..
NOW IT'S MY TURN TO HELP YOU UP YOUR
FEET.. IF THERE'S ANYTHING THAT I CAN
HELP YOU WITH JUST HIT ME UP...
I'VE GIVEN UP THE WRITING AND YOU HAVE
CONTINUED IT I'M GLAD..
AIGHT TAKE CARE AND KEEP IN TOUCH...
HERE'S MY EMAIL ADDRESS...

idiot_izuki09@hotmail.com

AMAZING!!!!!! that was... I'm blown away by your use of words the format and the emotion. the entire poem was a gripping read and when i think ive found my favourite part i just find another and then i cant decide. amazing. 1000/5 ~KM~

This is really sad but I know how you feel. Well written, full of emotion. 5/5. Em