Wow! Great poem! I love it so much! :)

Wow. That was really good. I the title to the poem is like...perfect.

And even if you're right beside me,
I feel like you're not there.
^^^^
I really like these two lines.
it's like he is there physically but he is in a total different world, mind is somewhere else...and (you famous words)
you HATE IT

i really like the poem

I'm glad i read this one. there have been time i felt this way with my girl but luckily we got better anyway nice write

I can reallly relate to this poem.great job.5/5
**harlea

Wow.. i completely understand how you're feeling. This person must really isolate himself from you. Fantastic job!
~em

Wow i can relate to this poem so well it sucks to feel like that but it gets better i promise great poem 5/5

*annak*

This poem is really good i like it

I really like this poem
lots of emotion
it was cool how it had rhyme to it but then the last line of every stanza was and i hate it

Hope your not in this probblem and if you are you will make it trust me and nice poem.=)

I love it. It's relatable, which is one of the reasons it's so great. Nice work.

This made me cry because i know EXACTLY how you feel. Its like there is always a reason to forgive and stay but 10 reasons to leave and never look back. but ur feel won't let you do it. this poem was perfect. especially for me! haha
ur words can speak to the heart and thats one of the almost unattainable qualities of good poetry
great work!
keep it up

5/5

I feel the same way.

This is a really good poem with a steady even flow. I like how you ended each stanza with "and I hate it".
"It's my heart I want to follow,
But my feet that just won't move."
^^ best lines, but that's probably why you used them for the title lol.
and did you mean "but it's my feet that just won't move?" maybe not.

We don't talk the way we used to,
Or act like we had before.
And each day I feel as if
We are drifting apart even more.
And I hate it.

I love how it goes right to the point, more room left for analyzing feelings rather tahn describing a sitution almost everyone can relate to. I also love the rhythm and the ABCB pattern.

It's like "we" don't even matter anymore.
It's like you don't even care.
And even if you're right beside me,
I feel like you're not there.
And I hate it.

I'm big for putting words like 'we' in quotation marks, it really allows the reader an insight to the mindset of the writer--putting dramatic emphasis on a word, casually. And to say that you feel alone when he is right there, I love that; a good portrayal of emotions.

I don't understand what's going on.
It's more than I can comprehend.
So even though I want to cry,
I smile and I pretend.
And I hate it.

Pretending is a very common thing. And it's rather depressing to think that it can be so common and the people who care most don't even notice. It shouldn't be that way.

I'm so confused.
And I don't know what to do.
It's my heart I want to follow,
But my feet that just won't move.
And I hate it.

Classic move of being the victim in a meaningful situation. Good choice.

I love all the things that you brought into this poem. It's moving and effective, powerful too. Very well written and good flow. I loved it.

LOVED YOUR POEM..........I CAN RELATE.................:(

I love this pome I can so relate...and I hate it....lol

Wow thats A great poem there's so much emotion in and itis amazing how you were able to characterize something and make it feel so real! Good JOB!

Great job..i felt like you were telling my story...like yo utook the words right from my own heart. i loved it. 5/5

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Your a great writer. i love this poem i understand it alot xoxoxo

Amazing poem it truly was... it makes u a great writer whn u can relate to more than just urself and i think u do such a great job. such a strong, emotional poem... btw i love how u did "we" it was it broght out the word.. it helped out the sanza.. 5/5 always
Kate~LSB23